Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Individuals prefer to spend money on buying clothes in the large quantity in some areas. People are being materialistic and follwing trends. However, people can purchase few clothes and save money.

The main reason to buy more clothes is the influence of social media. People get influenced by famous celebrities and try to buy everything that their role models wearing. For example,

Neeru Bajwa wore a blue colored dress in the shooting of a renowned song. After watching her videos, every girl started to purchase same suit at that time. Thus, people are following their famous celebrities. Furthermore, people are becoming materialistic, they believe in "use and throw" system. Individuals are not trying to save money for their future and spending money to fulfill their current needs. For instance, ladies have a habit to not repeat a dress a second time that push them to spend more money on new attires.

On the other hand, there are numerous ways to encourage them to decrease the spending on more outfits. The awareness compaigns can help to make people aware about the problems of the overspending such as spending money on other sectors. People can earn more money by invest this money in a business or donate in charity. Since they invest money, they can get more outcome from this. Moreover, buying more clothes every month is a bad habit that caused wastage of money. People should enroll in money management courese to learn how to use money wisely. Therefore, people need awareness to stop buying unnecessary things.

In conclusion, Buyers are spending huge amount of money to buy new outfits. The influence of celebrities is the main cause. However, it can be controlled by spreading knowledge about saving money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the task, discussing the reasons why people buy too many clothes and suggesting ways to reduce this behavior. A clear position is maintained throughout the essay. The reasons are supported by relevant explanations and examples, such as the influence of social media and celebrities like 'Neeru Bajwa'. However, some ideas could be further extended, and the development is occasionally limited by simplistic reasoning. Despite this, all parts of the prompt are covered sufficiently, earning this response a solid Band 6.0 according to the task response descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction and conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the causes and solutions. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, some referencing is slightly mechanical or repetitive, and logical progression between sentences can feel abrupt at times (e.g., 'People are being materialistic and follwing trends. However, people can purchase few clothes and save money.'). Overall, the logical structure meets the criteria for Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'materialistic', 'awareness compaigns', and 'money management courese'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'follwing' instead of following, 'few clothes' instead of fewer clothes, 'compaigns' instead of campaigns, and 'courese' instead of courses. These lexical inaccuracies and typos slightly detract from the overall quality, though they do not impede communication, placing the response at a Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. The writer attempts various structures, such as conditional and subordinate clauses, but encounters grammatical errors. Examples include 'buying clothes in the large quantity', 'what their role models wearing', 'cause wastage of money' (instead of causing), and 'invest this money' (instead of investing). While punctuation and basic grammar are mostly under control, frequent minor errors in articles, prepositions, and verb forms demonstrate the characteristics of Band 5.5, rounding to Band 6.0 given the successful communication of ideas.

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