Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There was enquire about the clothes, in some countries or places people oftenly buy too many clothes. Either they need or don't need they buy many clothes. I do not completely agree with this statement. We will discuss that people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy.

Begining with the meritorious aspects, In some places or countries in the world, people oftenly buying too many clothes. Whenever people used to go for shopping or visiting any tourist places unfortunately people attract by the clothes unwantedly they buy too many clothes, and sometimes these recent years people are oftenly going to gym, doing yoga, and some other activities they are participating for that case people buy more clothes for instance dresses codes are different for every activity consequently purchasing too many clothes. Moreover, some people influence by brands and celebraties, its approching people to buy too many clothes.

Furthermore, People should be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy, Some researchers found that in some countries people are buying too many clothes that should reduce, prior some solutions to reduce the number of clothes they buy. Educate people about the environment problems caused by wxcessive clothing consumption. Encourage people to think before buying.Choose durable clothes that can worn for a longer time. Reuse old clothes instead of throwing them away. Donate clothes they no longer need.

In conclude, People buy too many clothes oftenly for certain reasons, for instanse attracting throught brand, influence by celebrities, and participating for activities. Thus, we should encourage the people to think before buying. Sometimes it's beneficial to reuse old clothes instead of purchasing more. Donate clothes they no longer needed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the reasons why people buy too many clothes and suggesting ways to reduce consumption. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For instance, the reasons given, such as 'attracting throught brand' and 'influence by celebrities', are stated rather than fully explained or exemplified with strong detail. The introduction includes a slight misunderstanding or misphrasing regarding agreement with the statement. Overall, while all parts of the task are touched upon, the lack of deeper extension and support places this performance in the Band 5 to 6 range.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

Paragraphing is attempted, with distinct sections for the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which provides a basic structural framework. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, repetitive phrasing, and fragmented sentences, such as listing solutions with imperative fragments like 'Educate people...' without proper cohesive links. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and cohesive devices are used mechanically. While the overall arrangement shows an attempt at organisation, the execution suffers from frequent cohesion failures, fitting the Band 5 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'oftenly' instead of 'often', 'attract by' instead of 'attracted to', 'wxcessive' instead of 'excessive'). Less common lexical items are attempted, such as 'meritorious aspects' and 'consumption', but they are often used inaccurately or inappropriately in context. While the message remains generally understandable despite these lexical limitations, the vocabulary range is restricted and noticeably flawed, aligning with Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and error-prone attempts at complex structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including incorrect verb tenses and forms (e.g., 'can worn' instead of 'can be worn', 'celebraties' spelling/form issues), missing prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement. Run-on sentences and punctuation issues also occur. Because these frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning in places, the performance meets the criteria for Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

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