Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is undeniable that , In this Contemporary era, many people are buying so much more clothes than they actually need.There are so many reasons behind this sircumstances which are elaborated in forthcoming paragraphs with how to explain them to avoid to so.

To commence with, This era is called a era of fashion and more and more peple now becoming aware about

fashion, this could be one of reason that people buy a lot of cloths. Fashion of cloths always tend to change so frequently. Every day we can see something new in market. For instence, 2 3 years ago female used to wear nerrow pents and now a days they fond of beggy pents. Consequently, they now do not prefer to wear out of fashion cloths. Another reasons is that marriages and festivals. Everyone wants new cloths on each marriage functions and fastivals. They do not likre to repeat cloths on such ocassions. So, buy new cloths and after wearing one or two time beary they get chance to use again.

However human needs to understand to stop this. First people shoud think through environmental perspectives as they have so much cloths more than they need then it harms environment. People have to repeat cloths and they may have been inspired by celebrities. For example , if they see film actor wear same cloths in two functions so they may got influenced and avoid to buy more.

In conclusion, Due to frequent change in fashion , people like to spend a lot on cloths and get more than they wear , although they are being explain to stop this by explain them about environmenatl situation and influence from celibrities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for excessive clothing purchases (such as rapid fashion changes, social events like marriages and festivals) and suggesting ways people can be persuaded to reduce this behavior (such as environmental awareness and celebrity influence). However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on festivals and weddings briefly mentions people not liking to repeat clothes, but this point is not fully expanded with deeper elaboration. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments tend to be superficial. This performance aligns well with Band 6, where all parts of the task are addressed, but some ideas remain under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an overall coherent arrangement. However, referencing and logical transitions are often faulty or mechanical. For example, expressions like 'sircumstances which are elaborated in forthcoming paragraphs with how to explain them to avoid to so' are awkward and impede smooth progression. Cohesive devices are occasionally used inappropriately, and pronoun referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'they may got influenced and avoid to buy more' where the referents become confusing. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion lacks flexibility, placing the response firmly in the Band 5 category.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for communicating basic ideas related to the topic, but it is limited and marred by numerous spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'sircumstances', 'peple', 'cloths' (instead of clothes), 'instence', 'nerrow pents', 'beggy pents', 'fastivals', 'ocassions', and 'celibrities'. The writer attempts less common phrases like 'contemporary era' and 'environmental perspectives', but the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and misspelling of basic words restricts the score to Band 5. Communication is sometimes strained by these repeated vocabulary and spelling lapses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like conditional and relative clauses. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and sentence construction, such as 'many people are buying so much more clothes than they actually need', 'peple now becoming aware', 'Fashion of cloths always tend to change', and 'human needs to understand to stop this'. Punctuation is also problematic, evidenced by stray commas and run-on structures. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, placing the performance at Band 5.

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