Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In few countries of the World, some individuals do prefer to purchasing new Garments. Overall, there is described about cause of mosre purchasing new cloths and how it can be controled.

The main reason of buying new garnments is overwheming trend of Shopping new clothes form different Brands. Many brands are providing different Sale offers and attractive discounts for the promotion of different companies or brands. And clients prefer to buy their garments and kids clothing with these promotions.

There is also another reason of shopping clothes between government employees is that it has made a living standard. most of the Government employees having standard of wearing new clothes on every event of their institutes. they dont prefer to wear again old cloths on new event of institution.

on my working place there is trend to wear new cloths from new brands. however, they should be overcomed or prevented on this situation, because due to economical point of view, it is not affordable for all peolpe to purchase or buy new garments for every coming event of their institution. On the other hand, demand of new cloths on every new event, can can make burden on the monthly budget of earong person's income.

In conclusion, this fashion should be reduced to control economical condition. because some developed countries having better economical condition can afford this, but on the other hand people living in developing countries can be effected with the high prices of purchasing new garments. it should be controled.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt: reasons for buying excessive clothes and how to reduce this behavior. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. The writer mentions reasons such as sales promotions and a desire to maintain a social standard among government employees. The solution part is somewhat vague, suggesting that people 'should be overcomed or prevented on this situation' without offering concrete policy or personal strategies for reduction. While a position is presented, the arguments remain under-developed and lack the depth expected for higher bands. Overall, the performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptors, as the task is addressed, but the ideas lack full extension and clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into paragraphs with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing some overall structure. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and abrupt transitions. For instance, moving from discount promotions to government employees lacks smooth cohesive linking. Cohesive devices are used minimally or inaccurately, such as 'on my working place' and 'on the other hand' used repetitively and sometimes incorrectly. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is often faulty, causing the reader to pause. This falls under the Band 5 criteria due to the lack of clear overall progression and inadequate use of cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'prefer to purchasing', 'Garments', 'mosre', 'cloths', 'garnments', 'overheming', 'form', 'earong', and 'effected' instead of affected. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'promotions', 'economical point of view', and 'budget', but these are undermined by systematic lexical errors and incorrect collocations like 'living standard' instead of a high standard of living. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but errors in word formation and spelling place this firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the positive interpretation of basic communicative success.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty and ungrammatical, such as 'there is described about cause of mosre purchasing' and 'demand of new cloths on every new event, can can make burden'. There are persistent errors in punctuation, capitalization (e.g., 'World', 'Garments', 'Government'), and article usage. Subject-verb agreement is also problematic, as seen in 'most of the Government employees having standard' and 'some developed countries having better'. These frequent grammatical errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and reflect the characteristics of Band 4.0, though the basic meaning can sometimes be inferred.

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