Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, the most of people buy unnecessary clothes through online and offline shopping. There are some reasons behind this like follow role models, influence from offers as well as discounts. Awareness campaigns and buy fewer but good quality clothes are the solutions oftheis problem.

On the one hand, this trend has many reasons but one prominent reason is follow role models. Majority of youngsters follow thwie role models and they buy clothes which role models wear. They thought, role models clothes are good quality and they look like same as role models. For example, a younster role model is Tarsem Jassar who is film maker and the most of boys prefer clothes which he wear during shooting time and follow their trend. Moreover, there are distinctive types of advertisements as well as offers are available like but one get one free and 10% discount by buying two pieces of clothes.

However, there are some solutions to tackle this problem but one main solutions is awareness campaigns. It is a responsibility of government to aware people and youngster how clothes are making in the factories. It creates too much pollution during making the clothes. Furthermore, it is a responsibility of people they buy fewer clothes but good qality which is long lasting. Sometimes, they purchase clothes which has either cheaper or expensive but not good quality. They gain knowledge which cloth is long lasting ad after that buy it.

In conclusion, although, buying too many clothes is now a trend and this has some problems but this problems can be mitigated by joined efforts not onlt government but also youth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify role models and promotional offers as reasons for overbuying, then suggest awareness campaigns and choosing fewer, better-quality clothes. The example of boys copying Tarsem Jassar makes one reason more concrete, and the environmental impact gives the campaign proposal a relevant purpose. However, some ideas are only briefly explained. For instance, you mention discounts but do not explain how they encourage unnecessary purchases, and the advice to buy durable clothes could be developed with a practical example, such as repairing or reusing garments. A clearer explanation of how campaigns or other measures would change buying habits would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. The contrast between the two main sections is signalled by “On the one hand” and “However,” so the reader can follow the broad progression. Within paragraphs, though, connections are sometimes mechanical or unclear. The causes paragraph moves from role models to offers with “Moreover,” but the relationship between these points is not explained. Some references, such as “this problem” and “this trend,” could be more precise, and the conclusion’s “this problems” makes its reference less clear. Use topic sentences that preview each paragraph and link supporting details explicitly to the main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “role models,” “discount,” “awareness campaigns,” “pollution,” and “long lasting.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and there is some attempt to use less common language such as “prominent” and “mitigated.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision: “follow role models” would be more natural as “imitate role models,” while “how clothes are making in the factories” does not express the intended idea clearly. Spelling and word-form slips such as “qality,” “younster,” and “thwie” also reduce control. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for consumer behaviour and sustainability, and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “clothes which role models wear” and a conditional-style explanation beginning “Sometimes, they purchase clothes…”. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but grammatical control is uneven. Errors include missing or incorrect articles and agreement in “Majority of youngsters follow,” “role models clothes are,” and “this problems can be mitigated.” Verb forms and sentence construction also need attention in “they look like same as role models” and “how clothes are making in the factories.” Some sentences combine ideas without a complete or well-formed structure. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, possessives, and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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