Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, individuals purchase lot of fabric to wear in specific areas in universe. This is mainly because of new fashionable trends and advertisement. However, this problem can be addressed by

The significant reason behind the problem why people want to buy more attires is changing lifestyle day by day. Because people want to look more fashionable and organised, it allow them to enhance thier self-confidence and impacts on others. Additionally, someone do not like to wear clothes on repitition, as they always prefer have new on each day, since it can be their habit or hobby. Moreover, by watching discount advertisements on clothes on social media especially in online shopping encourage them to buy more clothes if something new comes in trending. For example, ther is ongoing discounts on things in online shopping and there is also opportunity to look at youselves how it can suits on you. Mostly, these things work and peopleencourage to buy the things in greed of discounts.

There are several ways to addres this issue. First prominent solution could be guide them to how much money they waste on their clothes in each month or each year while it does not necessary thing, it can be more impactful with practical example. For instance, egencies can take real example of someone and can interview him. After collecting all data, they show statistics to people and then guide them what they can do other things instead of wasting this money on clother. Subsequently, government should also make such policies that can prohibited to buying clothes to limit in specific time period.

In conclusion, trend of buying more clothes is mainly caused by modern lifestyle and advertisment. However, it can be reduced through proper practical guidance and making strict policies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify fashion-conscious lifestyles, reluctance to repeat outfits, and online discounts as reasons, then suggest practical guidance and government action. These are relevant ideas, and the example of showing people how much they spend gives the response a useful direction. However, the causes are explained more fully than the solutions. The proposal to make policies that prohibit buying clothes for a set period is not clearly explained or shown to be practical, and the interview-and-statistics idea needs a clearer account of how it would persuade people to change. Develop each solution by explaining its likely effect and giving a specific example; this would make the response more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. Within paragraphs, however, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “For example” introduces a long explanation of online discounts, but the relationship between trying clothes online and buying more is not fully clear. The solutions paragraph also moves from financial guidance to government restrictions without explaining how the ideas relate. The opening ends with “However, this problem can be addressed by” and leaves the thought unfinished. Use complete topic sentences and clearer links between each claim, explanation, and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “fashionable,” “self-confidence,” “discount advertisements,” “statistics,” and “policies.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “purchase lot of fabric,” “specific areas in universe,” “wear clothes on repitition,” and “in greed of discounts.” Spelling errors such as “thier,” “repitition,” and “advertisment” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for this topic, such as “buy more clothes than they need,” “follow fashion trends,” and “be tempted by discounts,” and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including explanations introduced by “Because” and “since,” and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement, and verb forms occur across the response. For instance, “it allow them” needs subject–verb agreement, while “someone do not like” and “they always prefer have” contain errors in agreement and verb pattern. The opening sentence of the solutions paragraph, beginning “First prominent solution could be guide them,” is difficult to parse because its structure is incomplete. The introduction also ends with an unfinished clause. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb patterns when editing; this will make your complex ideas easier to follow.

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