Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This certain topic has been a hot debate in peoples around the world that most individuals consumes or retails a lot of garments. Some people think that it is quite necessary for them while in contrast other think that this is a wastage of material as well as money. In this opinion, I will tell why I believe that it is an unhealthy habit or have many disadvantages.

In opinion of many people, who believe that buying vast amount of clothes because they are going to be wear in several events either personal or professional. If they have lot of dresses they can also make contrast and make a new elegant look. for instance, if they had to go to party every weekend they make their outfit looking unique by cutting and contrasting clothes with each other to give them unique look and create outfits. Furthermore, many people wanted to look elegant and do not want to repeat their dresses for another occasion they also buy clothes. In result, some peoples also went to dress couture's there they see model wearing dresses attract them and they also wanted to try them on themselves so they buy them.

In contrast to this opinion, many other individual including me believe that it is very unnecessary to do such thing because it requires both the money and time to do shopping. I believe that it is a luxurious habit for people and they enjoy doing it which in results them coasts a lot. Moreover, this activity is useless and waste of time which you can do to be more productive.

In conclusion, people should avoid doing it because maybe it makes people happy for sometime but it have a lot of drawbacks also. Individuals should have notice of the disadvantages so that they can use their money more usefully. Also that shopping quite often can save their time and they can be more productive.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic by giving reasons people buy many clothes, including wanting different outfits for events, avoiding repetition, and being influenced by fashion shows. However, the task also asks how people can be persuaded to buy fewer clothes, and this part is largely missing. The conclusion says people should avoid frequent shopping and use money more wisely, but it does not explain practical ways to persuade them, such as promoting second-hand clothing or raising awareness of fashion’s environmental impact. Your opening also introduces a debate about whether buying clothes is necessary, rather than clearly setting out your response to both questions. Develop the solutions as a distinct part of the essay and support them with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and connectors such as “Furthermore,” “In contrast” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships. However, progression is not always clear: the second body paragraph shifts from reasons for buying clothes to your view that shopping is wasteful, without developing the requested ways to reduce purchases. Some linking phrases are used inaccurately or mechanically, including “In result” and “In this opinion,” and the conclusion repeats the general idea that shopping has drawbacks rather than bringing the response’s main points together. Organise the essay around the two task questions, using one paragraph for causes and another for practical persuasion strategies, with clearer links between each idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “garments,” “outfit,” “occasion,” “luxurious habit” and “drawbacks,” so the reader can generally follow the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear. For example, “consumes or retails a lot of garments” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “make contrast” and “dress couture’s” are unclear in context. There is also repetition of “clothes,” “buy” and “people,” while “unique look” is repeated. Aim for precise phrases such as “purchase clothing,” “coordinate outfits” and “fashion shows,” and vary repeated vocabulary. Check word forms and spelling as well as whether each phrase fits its context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “because” and “if,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences often contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles or sentence construction. Examples include “most individuals consumes,” “they are going to be wear,” “many people wanted,” and “it have a lot of drawbacks.” There are also sentence-boundary and capitalisation problems, such as the lowercase “for instance” after a full stop. These recurring errors can make the reader pause. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and build longer sentences from a clear main clause before adding subordinate information.

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