Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Clothes is very important for human life beacuse it shows personality and beauty of that people. In yester years, mostly people prefer to wear home made colthes whereas nowsday, people loved to wear brand clothes and purchase may clothes. This issue is having a critical concern all over the world. There are number of factors which have contributed in the emergence of this issue.

The major reason why is people buy far too many clothes. For instance, the major reason is social media, people loved to click their picture and upload in the social media and for next time they need new clothes to take picture beacuse they do not prefer to click their picture on same dress which they already uploaded the picture in social media. Beside this, globalization of world and technology and new brands in market, people can easily buy the dress form online and whenever they use of any app the lots of adds attracted to them to buy new clothes. Moreover, today people work in offices and different private sectors and there they need to wear offically dress and formal dress and this is also big reason to buy too many clothes.

As "every locks has key" similar we have solution to not buy too many clothes. Firstly, people need to understand there requirements and purchase the clothes accordingly. Social media apps show the adds and giving you discount so that you buy new clothes but if people know their requirement and they purchase their clothes according them we can reduce this problem. secondly, people need to buy good quality clothes so that they can use them long time and good quality clothes feels you comfert and confidence, need to avoid cheap and bad quality clothes.

In conclusion, we can say that, nowsdays people buy too many clothes and it is noot good for world and there are more solution to avoid buy the clothes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the task: social media pressure, online advertising and workplace dress expectations are offered as reasons, while buying according to need and choosing durable clothing are proposed as solutions. These ideas are relevant and your overall position—that excessive clothing purchases are undesirable—is clear. The social-media explanation is the most developed, with a specific account of people wanting new outfits for photos. By contrast, the workplace point is only briefly stated, and the solutions would be stronger if you explained how people could be persuaded—for example, through public campaigns, incentives to repair or reuse clothes, or clearer information about environmental impacts. Develop each point with a little more explanation or an example to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions and a conclusion. The sequence of ideas is generally easy to follow, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Firstly” and “In conclusion” help show the direction of the argument. However, some linking is mechanical, and the long sentence beginning “For instance” combines several points that would be clearer if separated. References such as “this issue” and “this problem” are understandable but sometimes broad, so name the specific issue or cause when moving between ideas. The conclusion repeats the general point rather than drawing together the main causes and solutions. More controlled paragraph development and clearer links between examples and claims would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “social media,” “globalization,” “formal dress,” “good quality” and “discount,” so the main ideas can be understood. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, such as “critical concern” and “contributed in the emergence,” but these combinations are not natural in context. Noticeable spelling and word-choice errors—such as “beacuse,” “colthes,” “adds” for advertisements, and “comfert”—reduce accuracy and sometimes make the reader pause. Several expressions are also repeated, particularly “buy clothes” and “people need.” Build a more reliable range of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “excessive clothing consumption,” “targeted advertisements” and “durable garments” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including explanations with “because” and a conditional structure in “if people know their requirement… we can reduce this problem.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. Examples include the subject–verb agreement in “Clothes is,” the tense and form in “people loved to wear,” and the sentence pattern “The major reason why is people buy.” Articles, plurals and prepositions also need attention, as in “in the social media” and “use them long time.” Some sentences run together, particularly the extended explanation of social media, making grammatical relationships less clear. Practise accurate clause construction and vary sentence length while checking agreement and verb forms.

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