Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this kind of era. evryone have a fashion in the society. it could also young genration to show off like some one buy coat then otherone also plan to better then him or her so it was trand in markets. but if i was show in other site then it was deppend on whether also like when is Summer comes people like linen or light clothes because of heat whether and thear is also fashions. people on holiday then like to shoot photography so differnt place diffrent kind of photography and put in social media for show off. same like winter comes people buy to woolan clothes and thear is also different type of items or verity. same as Monsoon is comeing eveyone buy clothes and share pics to social media, of course if thear is fashion in markets.

One big part is Moveis and celebrity thay show of on media so people do that and again create fashion i think it's never being stop in this era every day every one need do do some thing new for popularity.

I think buying cloth unnecessary is more weste of money. in this world so manny person doesn't have a one time food and also wearing torn clothes and that could be really shameful for country also.

if every people is agree to use same clothes in every season then it could be helpfull to save some money and that was also happy to save money also celebrity stop to do this kind of advirtisment then it was possible to full stop that otherwise it has to massive issuse created by new genrations

Social life is very bigger so it could not to be never change. and fashion is craze of persons so very difficult to stop them also depend so many bussiness. it could never stop.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: fashion trends, social media, celebrities and seasonal needs are offered as reasons, while saving money and celebrity advertising are mentioned as possible ways to reduce purchases. However, the response only partially develops the task. The reasons overlap and are not clearly explained, and the proposed solutions—especially “use same clothes in every season”—are unrealistic and need justification or a more practical alternative. Your view that fashion is difficult to stop appears at the end, but it is not clearly reconciled with the suggested solutions. To strengthen the response, explain a few causes in depth and give workable measures, such as promoting clothing reuse or encouraging consumers to buy fewer, better-quality items.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from reasons for buying clothes to possible solutions and then to a concluding comment about the difficulty of changing fashion habits. However, progression within paragraphs is unclear, and several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sequences. For example, the discussion of summer, holidays, photography, winter and monsoon shifts rapidly without showing how each point supports the main explanation. Connectors such as “same like,” “same as” and “of course” are repetitive or imprecise, while “if every people…” introduces a solution without a clear link to the preceding point. Use separate paragraphs for causes, solutions and your conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fashion,” “social media,” “celebrity,” “season” and “advertisement,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make meaning difficult to follow, as in “it was trand in markets,” “woolan clothes” and “massive issuse.” Phrases such as “show off” and “do some thing new for popularity” are repeated or informal, and “one time food” does not clearly express the intended idea. Build a more precise set of expressions for consumer behaviour and solutions, such as “impulse purchases,” “fashion trends,” “clothing consumption” and “reuse garments.” Check spelling and choose collocations that express your meaning directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “if every people is agree to use same clothes in every season then it could be helpfull to save some money.” However, complex attempts are often difficult to follow, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries affect clarity. Examples include “evryone have,” “when is Summer comes,” and “people buy to woolan clothes.” Several sentences begin with a dependent clause but are not punctuated or completed clearly, while the opening fragment, “In this kind of era,” is separated from the next sentence. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses with correct subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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