Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You rent a flat from an accommodation agency. Your neighbour who rents their flat from the same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

Write a letter to the accommodation agency. In your letter

• explain when the problem began

• describe how the noise affects you

• say what you would like the agency to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you about the problem which I am facing after shifting in a flat which I rent from your agency. The flat is good and air conditioned but unfortunately my neighbour is very disturbing because he plays different types of video games very loudly at night.

Furthermore, I want to tell you that I can not take adequate sleep because of this loud volume of games and failed to sleep at night. Consequently, I have commuted to office early morning and due to inadequate sleep I am unable to pay full attention at my work.

In addition to this, I want that the agency should guide him the rules and regulations about night hours. Moreover, you should also tell him that he should play video games in his room with low voice.

I hope you will understand my issue and you would also take an serious action on it. I am waiting for your prompt response.

Kind regards,

Nosheen

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main situation and make a clear request for the agency to intervene, including telling the neighbour about night-time rules and asking him to lower the volume. You also explain the effect on your sleep and work. However, one required point is missing: you do not say when the problem began. The impact is relevant but could be developed more clearly, and the requested action would be stronger if you specified a practical step, such as contacting the neighbour or enforcing quiet hours. The opening also gives unnecessary details about the flat being air-conditioned rather than establishing when the disturbance started. Covering every prompt point with specific information would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce the complaint, describe its effects, request action, and close politely. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and connectors such as “Furthermore,” “Consequently,” and “In addition to this” show relationships between ideas. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and also shows some flexibility in linking points. However, several transitions feel formulaic, and “Furthermore” introduces another effect without a particularly clear distinction from the previous sentence. The progression would be more natural if each paragraph focused on one purpose and links were used only where they clarify the relationship. A more direct transition from the problem to its consequences would improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the complaint, including “adequate sleep,” “inadequate sleep,” “rules and regulations,” and “prompt response.” The meaning is generally understandable, but several word choices and collocations are noticeably unnatural or imprecise, which limits the range and control. For example, “after shifting in a flat” and “commuted to office” do not express the intended ideas naturally, while “low voice” is not the usual phrase for reducing game volume. “An serious action” also contains an inaccurate form. Aim for precise, conventional expressions such as “since moving into the flat,” “travelled to work,” “lower volume,” and “serious action.” This would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the cause-and-effect sentence beginning “Consequently” and the clause “because of this loud volume of games.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, and errors rarely prevent understanding. Some grammatical inaccuracies remain, however: “after shifting in a flat which I rent” has an awkward verb pattern, “I can not take adequate sleep” is not correctly formed, and “an serious action” uses the wrong article. There are also tense and structure issues in “I have commuted to office early morning,” which would be clearer as “I have to travel to the office early in the morning.” Continue practising articles, verb patterns, and prepositions while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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