Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You rent a flat from an accommodation agency. Your neighbour who rents their flat from the same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

Write a letter to the accommodation agency. In your letter

• explain when the problem began

• describe how the noise affects you

• say what you would like the agency to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir / Madam,

I formally writing this letter to you I have a concern about my neighbour in my flat they play very loud video games late at night and I cannot sleep properly because of the loud sounds that I heard. and they dont care about their neighbour they continuing to play a video games.

It affects to me a lot because when I came to work I cannot fucos due to lack of sleep and my health will be affected too. I need to sleep atleast 8 hours a day because I have a health issue I have a insomia it is difficulty in sleep. Please make a action about this because they are affecting others that who are getting rest. you can talk to them personally or you can send a letter to them.I am looking foward that you will do a action as soon as possible thank you and god bless

your's truly,

rick joel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the central problem—your neighbour plays loud video games at night—and explain that it disrupts your sleep and affects your ability to work. You also ask the agency to speak to the neighbour or send a letter, so the requested action is present. However, the task is only partly addressed: you do not explain when the problem began, and the effects and requested action are not developed clearly. For example, “when I came to work I cannot focus” gives a relevant consequence, but the letter could explain how often this happens and what specific outcome you expect, such as quiet after a stated hour. Add the missing timeline and make the request more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The reader can follow the main sequence: you introduce the noise, describe its impact, and ask the agency to intervene. This gives the letter some organisation, and phrases such as “It affects me a lot” signal a move to the consequences. However, most of the response is placed in one long paragraph, so the stages of the letter are not clearly separated. Several ideas run together, particularly in “Please make an action about this because they are affecting others…” and the closing request. Some links are repetitive or unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the problem, its effects, and your request, and connect each point with straightforward transitions such as “Since this began…” and “Therefore, I would appreciate it if…”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough relevant vocabulary to communicate the basic situation, including “loud video games,” “lack of sleep,” “health issue,” and “send a letter.” The topic is generally clear, but the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the letter less natural. For instance, “make a action” and “do a action” are awkward expressions, while “fucos,” “insomia,” and “foward” are misspelled. “They don’t care about their neighbour” is also a broad, informal claim rather than a precise description of the behaviour. Build a more suitable formal range with phrases such as “disturbing the peace,” “interfering with my sleep,” and “take appropriate action,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express connected ideas and give reasons, for example by linking poor sleep to difficulty concentrating at work. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter difficult to read. The opening, “I formally writing this letter,” is missing a verb form, and “they continuing to play” also needs a finite verb. There are problems with articles and sentence boundaries in “I have a insomnia it is difficulty in sleep,” while the opening sentence joins several clauses without clear punctuation. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because” or “which”; careful proofreading for verbs, articles, and full stops would improve clarity.

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