Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Myname is Monu. I am from rohtak haryana india .I have recently completed my 12 th class education. I study english hindi mathematics chemistry physics education. Iiam parpering IELTS exam because english continue with above abroad. I want to go to germany is a beautiful europe country. I have interest Hotel Management.I enjoying meeting New people and learning a foreign language . I Intrest hospitality industry. My hobbies gaming a kabbadi, movie and spending time with my family and friends
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the basic length requirement of 150 words, containing only 80 words. Because it is severely under-length, the task cannot be fully developed. While the student provides a brief introduction and some personal details such as wanting to study hotel management in Germany, the ideas remain minimal and undeveloped. There is no clear adherence to standard letter or essay formats that would typically be expected in a general writing task. Consequently, the task achievement is constrained by the brevity and lack of elaboration, leading to a Band 4.0 classification.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks formal paragraphing, appearing as a single block of disconnected sentences. Ideas are stated disjointedluy without proper transitions or logical connectors. For instance, sentences like 'I want to go to germany is a beautiful europe country' and 'I have interest Hotel Management' jump abruptly between different topics without smooth referencing. The absence of cohesive devices and logical sequencing results in a disjointed flow. Therefore, the overall arrangement struggles to maintain clarity, aligning with a Band 4.0 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying on elementary terms such as 'beautiful', 'family', and 'friends'. There are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'continue with above abroad' and 'I Intrest hospitality industry' instead of 'I am interested in the hospitality industry'. The student also misspells words like 'parpering' and uses incorrect phrasing for hobbies like 'gaming a kabbadi'. The limited range and recurrent lexical inaccuracies restrict the vocabulary score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures are extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, fragmented sentences with frequent omissions of auxiliary verbs, articles, and prepositions, as seen in 'I study english hindi mathematics chemistry physics education' and 'I have interest Hotel Management'. There are numerous basic grammatical errors, including capitalization and punctuation mistakes, which frequently strain the reader and distort meaning. Due to the lack of complex structures and high frequency of errors, a Band 4.0 is awarded.
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