Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear Raman, To begin with i am a writting letter to inform your about next week i
go with my family in Shimla and in my absent time please take care own home.Moving further, it is two story house. There are seven rooms, one kitchen, one living room and garder. However, In my house most beautiful room own my children because its decorated according me and please clean time to time. I have a pet. the name is jackey. jacky was not sleeped with eating. this food on tmy kithcen and it is locked in south side. All foods avaiable in fridge. Nextly, one garden lockted in northside and there are several types of flowers. please watering the plants in my absence. your loving rupinder.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the purpose of the letter, which is to inform Raman about going to Shimla and asking him to take care of the house, pet, and garden. However, the tone is inconsistent and key details are somewhat unclear or underdeveloped, such as the pet feeding instructions ('jacky was not sleeped with eating'). Furthermore, an explicit length check establishes that the student's response contains only 125 words, falling short of the required 150-word minimum. This significant under-length constraint heavily penalises the task achievement score, pulling it down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The letter lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing. While the student attempts transitional phrases like 'To begin with' and 'Moving further', these connectors are used awkwardly and do not create a smooth, coherent flow of ideas. Paragraphing is rudimentary and mixes distinct topics (house details, pet care, and garden watering) within single blocks of text, making the overall structure disjointed and difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'writting letter', 'absent time', 'garder', 'own my children', 'lockted'). There are also spelling mistakes such as 'jackey' and 'kithcen'. The lexical range is limited to simple descriptive terms, and these numerous errors occasionally impede communication, placing the response firmly in Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The student relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences result in severe grammatical errors and non-standard syntax (e.g., 'i am a writting letter to inform your about next week i go with my family in Shimla', 'jacky was not sleeped with eating'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors, the writing aligns with Band 4.0.
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