Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hey, My name is Meerab Waseem. I am from Faisalabad Pakistan. I am a graduate of The University of Faisalabad. My Year of Graduation is 2024. My basic degree is Doctor Of Physical Therapy. I got 1st position in 1st year of Doctor of Physical Therapy. Currently I am M.phil Scholar at University of Agriculture Faisalabad . I am doing M.phil in Epidemology and Public Health. It will be completed in October 2026. Side by side I am working as a Consultant Physiotherapist in Sughra Saddique Hospital Samundri. Every Friday I arranged a free medical camp there. I provide free of cost Treatment to the poor and needy people. I engage other medical Proffessionals with me like Nurses, Pharmacist and Medical lab Technologist. Abundant number of patients come on Friday as compared to other days. Now, I am waiting for my external viva for the Award of Degree of M.phil. I learned a lot from my journey.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by introducing the writer, providing background information about education and current employment, and describing community outreach efforts. However, the tone and structure feel more like a personal biography or informal introduction rather than a formal General Training letter or task response. While the content is relevant to personal background, it lacks a clear functional purpose typically expected in IELTS writing tasks, such as applying for a job, writing to a pen pal, or responding to an invitation. The ideas are presented but remain somewhat disjointed and descriptive rather than fully developed for a specific communicative goal. Consequently, the task achievement is limited by the lack of clear task alignment.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, as it is presented as a single block of text rather than organized into logical paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive, relying heavily on simple conjunctions or starting sentences abruptly with phrases like 'Side by side' or 'Now, I am waiting'. There is an overall lack of smooth progression between ideas, jumping rapidly from graduation details to hospital work and then back to academic status without clear transitional links. While individual sentences are generally understandable, the organizational structure falls short of coherent text progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range suitable for describing personal background and professional life, using terms such as 'Consultant Physiotherapist', 'Epidemology', and 'medical lab Technologist'. However, there are noticeable spelling and capitalization errors throughout the text, such as 'M.phil', 'Epidemology' (epidemiology), 'Proffessionals' (professionals), and 'Technologist' (technologists). While the vocabulary used is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, the lexical control is inconsistent, and the presence of these errors restricts the score to the mid-band range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and moderately complex sentence structures, such as 'Abundant number of patients come on Friday as compared to other days.' However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors including missing articles ('I am M.phil Scholar'), incorrect prepositions ('in University of Agriculture Faisalabad'), and tense or aspect issues ('Every Friday I arranged a free medical camp there', where the present habitual tense should be used instead of the past). Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent at the sentence level. These errors occur frequently and occasionally cause strain for the reader.

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