Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Hi, my name is Khadam Hussain. I live in a small town situated near the Chenab river in Gujrat. My village name is Faizabad. I have recently completed my intermidiate with ICS from Punjab college. Now I am preparing for my ielts for 2 months. My future plans is to study abroad with full freedom. I like to playing Football with my friend in spare time. I am not a good player but it gives me cool vibes and do my exercise at the same time. I also likes the nature because I have grown a big tree in my house wich gives us shad fresh oxygen. I am lazzy in some situations However, what I do with heart I do it perfectly. Furthermore, I am eager to adapt new skills quickly like I have intrest in Computes science and while learning about programing language in college, I learned a complete programing language C instead of learning some basics.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response addresses the task only partially. While the writer introduces themselves, mentions their location, and provides some personal details, the content is quite limited and lacks adequate development. Ideas such as future plans ('study abroad with full freedom') and hobbies ('playing Football with my friend') are stated simply without being extended or supported with further details. Furthermore, the response reads more like a personal social media introduction rather than a fully realized task response, meaning the overall position and purpose remain restricted and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation in the text, grouping personal details, hobbies, and educational background together, but there is no clear overall progression from sentence to sentence. Cohesive devices are inadequate, repetitive, or missing entirely, relying mostly on simple conjunctions or transitional words like 'However' and 'Furthermore' which are used somewhat mechanically. Paragraphing is also absent, as the entire text is presented as a single block. Referencing is occasionally unclear, which disrupts the smooth flow of ideas throughout the passage.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for communicating basic personal information. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling throughout the text, such as 'intermidiate', 'lazzy', 'intrest', and 'Computes science', which cause some difficulty for the reader. While the writer attempts to use some less common words like 'adapt' and 'programing language', these attempts are accompanied by inaccuracies in collocation and spelling that prevent a higher level from being achieved.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences alongside a few attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'My village name is' instead of 'The name of my village is', 'My future plans is', 'likes the nature', and 'shad fresh oxygen'. Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent, and these frequent errors across basic and complex structures can cause difficulty for the reader.

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