Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Student answer (Band 4.0)

hello dear /sir

I am wariting this to my friend who need to sport how to leran any sport for in early age . Also cricket dimanod is so much .If last few year however if good gudie line giveing .My friend so haire good future . and one more thing i am add on if Good coching take main comeing internation team in india.But first you need good techer or good coach He train my friend he and what improve ment his need technic also and other hand fist he need good pratice .how use foot how to face boll in bat how to handle bolwer .If they good bowling sklils .They aslo note very not day basman some time bowler to good This you learn .scandly always grounded be kind help your jonior tech them you have good skils no matter how big you player be honest your game

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make a relevant attempt to advise your friend about learning cricket, mentioning coaching, practice, technique, and good sportsmanship. These points show some awareness of the likely purpose of the letter. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the opening is unclear, and the advice is difficult to identify or follow in places, such as “If last few year however if good gudie line giveing.” Several ideas are introduced but not explained, and there is no clear, complete message to the friend. To improve, state your purpose directly, organise a few practical recommendations, and explain how each would help your friend develop as a player. End with an appropriate closing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a loose sequence of related ideas: you move from finding a coach to practising batting and bowling, then to being kind and helping juniors. This gives the reader a general sense that you are offering cricket advice. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear sentences or paragraphs, and connections between them are often unclear. For example, “But first you need good techer or good coach” is followed by several points without clear transitions, while “This you learn” does not clearly refer to a specific idea. Use separate paragraphs for coaching, practice, and attitude, and connect each point with simple, accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary includes some task-related terms, such as “coach,” “practice,” “technique,” “bowler,” and “skills,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors or inaccurate word choices strain the reader’s understanding. Examples include “wariting,” “sport,” “dimanod,” “coching,” and “basman”; the intended words are sometimes difficult to identify. Build a reliable set of cricket vocabulary and check spelling carefully. You could also use more precise expressions for advice, such as “develop batting technique” or “improve bowling skills,” rather than relying on repeated references to “good” skills or practice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt a few longer structures, including “If they good bowling sklils” and “you have good skils no matter how big you player be,” but most sentences lack a clear grammatical structure. Errors in verbs, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “He train my friend he and what improve ment his need” does not form a clear sentence, and “how use foot how to face boll in bat” lacks the grammatical words needed to express the advice. Practise writing short complete sentences first, with a subject and verb, then join related ideas using simple conjunctions. Check verb forms and punctuation when revising.

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