Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Student answer (Band 5.0)

hi! i am dilpreet singh. I love to travel different states. himachal is my one of the favourite in states. In Himachal, i love to visit the Chandrataal lake which is located in Himachal and just 35 kilometers far from Manali. Manali is also a famous place in that state. It has spectacular view and the lake is fully covered with mountains. It has such a mesmerising to see. the mountains fully covered with vibrant trees. I really enjoyed when i visited to there. I travelled by car. I have a SUV car the name of the car is fortuner. I went there 2 months ago with my three friends and a nephew. we reached to our destination the view is wonderable to us. We spent three days there, on the fourth day we came back to our home. I would like to suggest everyone to visit there and make trip memorable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response gives a personal account of a trip to Chandrataal Lake, including its location, scenery, travel companions, transport and duration. These details make the topic identifiable, but the task is addressed only minimally because the actual task question is not provided here, so it is not possible to confirm that the response covers the required points. The opening, “hi! i am dilpreet singh,” and the general recommendation to visit do not establish a clear purpose or audience for a formal letter. To strengthen the response, make sure each point in the prompt is answered directly, explain the reason for writing at the outset, and develop relevant details rather than relying mainly on a sequence of personal events.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas follow a broadly understandable order: you introduce the destination, describe its scenery, explain how and with whom you travelled, and finish with a recommendation. This gives the reader some organisation. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, and progression is mostly a list of details rather than a clearly shaped letter. Repeated references such as “the lake” and “there” sometimes make connections less precise, while “In Himachal” and “Manali is also a famous place” interrupt the description without a clear link. Use paragraphs for the purpose, description and travel experience, and connect events with accurate sequencing phrases such as “After arriving” and “On the fourth day.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant descriptive vocabulary, including “spectacular,” “mesmerising” and “vibrant,” which helps convey your enjoyment of the landscape. The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main topic, but several choices are inaccurate or repetitive and reduce naturalness. For example, “one of the favourite in states” is unclear, “wonderable” is not the appropriate adjective, and “make trip memorable” needs more natural phrasing. “Fully covered” is also repeated for the lake and mountains, although the intended descriptions differ. Build a more precise range for travel writing, especially for scenery, distance and personal impressions, and check collocations and word forms before using less familiar expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates a sequence of past events and includes some longer sentence attempts, such as the description of the lake and the account of travelling with friends. However, the range is limited, and attempts to join several ideas often produce faulty sentences. Examples include “I really enjoyed when i visited to there” and “we reached to our destination the view is wonderable to us,” where verb patterns, prepositions and sentence boundaries are not controlled. There are also recurring issues with articles, agreement and capitalisation, as in “It has spectacular view” and lowercase “i” and “we.” Practise separating complete ideas with full stops and using consistent past-tense forms; this will make the account easier to follow.

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