Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Hello ! My name is Haif Nazish and i am a fresh graduate from Bashir Institue of Health Sciences , Islamabad.I am now looking for a job in my own feild but untill that i want some new skills like i am intrested in Medical Billing.It would help me in my part time earning source and also i can carry it for the long time career as my side job.And alongside that i am also looking for the fully funded scholorships in UK, Austrailia and Canada.If i found any good one according to my needs and requirements then i will consider to do Masters in Translational Medicine fron University of Bristol,UK.And also i have some other universities asan option but it all d

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response gives some relevant personal information: you identify yourself as a recent graduate, explain your interest in medical billing, and mention possible postgraduate study and funding. However, the task is addressed only partially because the response is 27 words below the required minimum and ends abruptly at “but it all d…”. This leaves your plans incomplete and gives little explanation of what kind of job you seek, why medical billing appeals to you, or what help or information you are requesting from the recipient. Develop these points and make the purpose of the letter explicit. A complete closing would also help the reader understand what response you expect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The ideas can be followed in a basic sequence, moving from your education and job search to medical billing and then further study. Linking expressions such as “alongside that” and “if I found any good one” show an attempt to connect related points. However, nearly all the information is presented in one long paragraph, and repeated use of “and” makes the progression feel like a list rather than a developed letter. The final sentence is cut off, so the ending has no clear conclusion. Separate the purpose, career plans, and study plans into paragraphs, and use clearer transitions to show how each point relates to your request.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-specific vocabulary, including “Medical Billing,” “fully funded scholarships,” and “Translational Medicine,” which helps communicate your interests. There is also some range in describing your plans, such as “part time earning source” and “side job.” However, several spelling errors and awkward word combinations reduce accuracy and polish, including “Institue,” “feild,” “scholorships,” and “earning source.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “carry it for the long time career.” These choices do not prevent the main ideas from being understood, but careful proofreading and more natural collocations would make the letter clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine ideas using conditional and subordinate structures, for example, “If I found any good one according to my needs and requirements then I will consider…” This shows some effort beyond simple sentences. However, the range is limited, and several sentence patterns are difficult to control. The conditional shifts from “found” to “will consider,” and the opening contains run-on sentences joined with “and.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “i am” and “Islamabad.I”. Use shorter, complete sentences and check verb forms, sentence boundaries, and capital letters. More accurate control of these basic structures would make your meaning easier to follow.

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