Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You rent a flat from an accommodation agency. Your neighbour who rents their flat from the same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

Write a letter to the accommodation agency. In your letter

• explain when the problem began

• describe how the noise affects you

• say what you would like the agency to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I recently rented a flat here from your agency. I finally found a place that suits to my mind's peace. I am writing this letter to you to share my problem here that has been bothering me for quite a while now. It is none other than my neigbours who plays video games late at night.

Firstly, it is near to my office and I break my bread and butter by spending 9 straight hours working there. With all that work stress, a man is deemed to hit the hay in his humble abode on his bed and no one should disturb him until he is fully charged back to work again.

Therefore, noises that are mellow and sweet are amusing enough for a person who lurks to have his enviornment as less noisy as it is possible. I wish you to find me another place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the central issue—your neighbour plays video games late at night—and explain that work leaves you needing rest. However, the task is addressed only minimally: you do not say when the noise began, and the effect on you is described generally rather than through a clear consequence, such as disrupted sleep or difficulty working. Your request, “I wish you to find me another place,” is clear but does not directly ask the agency to address the neighbour’s noise, which is the main problem. To develop the response, state when the gaming started, explain its specific impact, and request a practical action such as contacting the neighbour or enforcing quiet hours. The letter also needs a more consistently appropriate formal tone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a basic sequence: an opening that introduces the complaint, a paragraph about your work and need for rest, and a final statement of what you want. “Firstly” and “Therefore” signal relationships between ideas, and the reader can identify the general topic. However, the progression is not consistently logical: the paragraph beginning “Therefore” discusses noise in abstract terms rather than clearly connecting the neighbour’s gaming to its effects on you. The request to move also arrives without a clear explanation of why this is the preferred solution. Organise the letter around the three requested points, using a separate paragraph for each, and make the links between the noise, its impact, and your requested action explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You show an adequate range and attempt less common expressions, including “bothering me,” “hit the hay,” and “fully charged.” These choices show willingness to vary your vocabulary, but several are too informal or do not fit a formal complaint letter. “Break my bread and butter” and “mellow and sweet” also make the intended meaning unclear, while “neigbours” and “enviornment” are spelling errors. Prefer precise, natural language for this situation, such as “earn my living,” “loud gaming noise,” and “disrupts my sleep.” Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general issue, but more accurate collocations and a consistent formal register would make the complaint clearer and more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more extended sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “With all that work stress” and the clause “who lurks to have his enviornment…”. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “my neighbours who plays” has a subject–verb agreement error; “neighbours” is plural, so the verb should be “play.” In “I finally found a place that suits to my mind’s peace,” the construction after “suits” is not grammatically formed. The long sentence beginning “With all that work stress” also joins ideas awkwardly. Use shorter, controlled sentences to explain the timeline and impact, while checking agreement and sentence boundaries.

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