Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You rent a flat from an accommodation agency. Your neighbour who rents their flat from the same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

Write a letter to the accommodation agency. In your letter

• explain when the problem began

• describe how the noise affects you

• say what you would like the agency to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I write this letter to you as i took a flat on a rent from your agency last month . Everything is perfect but i am facing a serious problem which affects me mentally as well as physically.

I can from the work at 6pm and i finish all my work very quickly to get a better sleep from being tired whole day i was just lay down on my bed at 10 pm suddenly my neighbor play loud music .

The music was so loud i also covered my ears with pillow and try to sleep but i couldn't ,due to loud music my head start paining then i have to take medicine .I was tried everything but nothing works then my last option was to take sleeping pills because i have to woke up early to go to my work.

I want you to take immediate actions to this problem because i am not the only one to face this problem other flat member feels the same you should make some strict rules and regulations for your accommodation .

Thankyou and i am looking forward to your response

Yours faithfully

Twinkle Jasrotia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points: you say the issue arose after moving in last month, describe its effect on your sleep and health, and ask the agency to take action. The impact is made clear through details such as covering your ears, developing a headache and needing to wake early for work. However, the timing of the noise is not fully clear: the letter mentions arriving home at 6 p.m. and lying down at 10 p.m., but does not explicitly say the neighbour plays games late at night or when this behaviour first began. The request for “strict rules and regulations” is relevant but general. Specify a practical step, such as contacting the neighbour and enforcing quiet hours, to develop this part more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a sensible overall order: you introduce the problem, explain its effects, and then make a request. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and the reader can understand your main concern. Some connections between ideas are less clear, however. The long sentence beginning “I can from the work at 6pm” combines your routine, tiredness and the noise without clear punctuation, making the sequence difficult to follow. The repeated use of “because” and “but” also makes the linking somewhat mechanical. Use shorter sentences to separate events, and add clear time references—for example, explain when the noise starts and how often it happens. A more specific closing request would also give the letter a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main problem and its effects, including “serious problem,” “loud music,” “covered my ears” and “sleeping pills.” These choices make your complaint understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are unnatural, such as “on a rent,” “take immediate actions” and “other flat member.” The task also concerns loud video games, but you refer to “music,” which is less precise. Aim for more accurate complaint-letter language and natural collocations, such as “rent a flat,” “take immediate action,” and “other residents.” Check spelling and word forms as well, including “Thank you” and “painful headache.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to explain events using both simple and longer sentence forms, and the overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, sentence construction and punctuation sometimes make the account harder to follow. For example, “I can from the work” and “my neighbor play” need corrected verb forms, while “I was just lay down” does not form a correct past-tense construction. The sentence beginning “I was tried everything” also combines clauses without clear control. Practise forming past-tense sequences consistently and separating complete ideas with full stops. Pay attention to capitalisation and punctuation, too, such as the lowercase “i” and missing spaces after commas. More accurate control of these patterns would make your message clearer.

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