Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You rent a flat from an accommodation agency. Your neighbour who rents their flat from the same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

Write a letter to the accommodation agency. In your letter

• explain when the problem began

• describe how the noise affects you

• say what you would like the agency to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir,

I am writting this letter for inform you my neighbour who rents their flat from same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

you know that i stayed in this apartment from long time last week my neighbour which stay in the same apartment they play very loud video games late at night. At night when i do study they play video games very loud because of this my family member face many kind of problems like my grandparents which take medican for surviving they face very obstacles during sleep.with this way i take not proper sleep next day we all face many problems. my father say many time for not play loud video games at late night alwayes they ignore me.

I would be grateful if you could solve my problem and please you could interduce about this apartment rule and regulation beacuse other people not face this type problems.

Your sincerly,

Mandeep kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the central issue—your neighbour plays loud video games at night—and explain that it disrupts your studying and your family’s sleep. You also ask the agency to address the problem and explain the rules, so the main purpose is clear. However, the start of the problem is not clearly stated: “last week” appears, but the surrounding sentence is difficult to interpret. The effects and requested action are also only briefly developed; for example, specify how often this happens and ask the agency to contact the neighbour or enforce quiet hours. The response is 149 words, one word below the required 150-word minimum, which limits the opportunity to develop the points fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the complaint, describe its effects, and then make a request. This gives the reader a basic sense of purpose. However, the main paragraph combines several ideas in a long, difficult-to-follow sequence, and links such as “because of this” and “with this way” do not always make the relationships clear. The opening also repeats the complaint without smoothly leading into when it began. Use separate paragraphs for the problem and its effects, then the requested action, and connect each point with clear transitions. This would make the progression easier to follow and reduce the impression of repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “late at night,” “video games,” “sleep,” and “rule and regulation,” so the reader can identify the complaint. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “medican for surviving,” “face very obstacles,” and “interduce.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “take not proper sleep.” Choose more precise expressions and check spelling: for example, say that your grandparents “take medication” and “have difficulty sleeping,” and that you “do not get enough sleep.” A broader set of accurate complaint-related phrases would make the letter clearer and more appropriate for an agency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate several connected ideas, including the effect of the noise on your family, but sentence structures are often difficult to control. For instance, “my neighbour which stay in the same apartment they play” has unclear clause structure and agreement, while “when i do study they play” uses an incorrect verb form. Missing or inconsistent sentence punctuation also makes the long central passage hard to read. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, and attempts to combine ideas often lead to errors that obscure meaning. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences, using past and present tenses consistently, and separating complete ideas with full stops. These changes would improve accuracy and readability.

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