Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You rent a flat from an accommodation agency. Your neighbour who rents their flat from the same agency plays very loud video games late at night.

Write a letter to the accommodation agency. In your letter

• explain when the problem began

• describe how the noise affects you

• say what you would like the agency to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir,

Last night when i came back to my flat i done dinner and sit on sofa to see tv. During watching tv i hear a loud noise of vedio games and music.the office stress and than this loud sound make me angry.I decided to go to their flat and ask them to make the sound level low.But i think i inform you about this situation thats a good imapct for them when you asked them for this loud music.

This noise make me angry every night because the office stress than this loud music make my mood shit.This loud music effect my mentle state and loud noise effect my ear also.

I want agency would go their flat and ask them strictly for this problem.Tell them to make music volume low.If they not act on this demand in future you will ask them to leave ther flat

thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the central issue—your neighbour’s loud gaming and music—and make a clear request for the agency to intervene, including asking the neighbour to lower the volume. However, the task is addressed only partially because the timing is not explained clearly: “Last night” describes one incident, while “every night” suggests an ongoing problem, but you do not say when it first began. You explain that the noise affects your mood and mental state, but the impact could be more specific and clearly connected to late-night disturbance. Develop the request in a more practical way, such as asking the agency to contact the neighbour and enforce quiet hours. The threat of eviction is abrupt and not fully explained.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter contains relevant information and is divided into paragraphs, with the noise, its effects, and your request appearing in a broadly understandable order. However, progression is uneven: the opening moves from dinner and television to the neighbour and then to an unclear comment about informing the agency. The effects paragraph repeats “This noise” and “This loud music,” while the final request shifts quickly from lowering the volume to asking the neighbour to leave. Linking words such as “because” and “if” are attempted, but some connections are unclear. Organise the letter around the three requested points, and use clear transitions to show how the noise began, what it causes, and what action you expect.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “loud noise,” “video games,” “music,” “angry,” and “volume low,” so the main concern is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the message difficult to interpret, such as “office stress,” “good imapct,” and “my mood shit.” Repetition of “loud” and “noise” also limits precision. Choose more suitable expressions for a formal complaint, for example, “disturbs my sleep,” “affects my concentration,” and “take appropriate action.” Check spelling and word forms, including “video,” “mental,” and “impact,” and avoid informal or offensive wording when writing to an agency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate events and requests using both simple sentences and longer structures, including “If they not act on this demand in future you will ask them to leave.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Verb forms are often inaccurate: “i done dinner,” “sit on sofa,” and “i hear” need appropriate past-tense forms. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “This noise make me angry” and “I want agency would go.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with sentences joined together after full stops. Practise accurate past-tense narration and clear request forms, such as “I would like the agency to contact my neighbour.”

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