Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Individuals are taking medicines and tablets without doctors advice due to, every health issues have proper tablets and serups in pharmacies and medical stores.In my point of view this is extremely goes wrong because, doctors are provide strong suggestions to patients.

In this era most of the facilities are getting to the people without any delays and interruptions because ,of technology developments.They can just order a tablet or medical product with online delivery applications.Therfore, most of the customers are not willing to visit specialist doctors.This makes very harmful for their health owing to, an early time a patient wants to visit the hospital for health concern.For an example, a patient has been sufferring lukumeia blood cancer since childhood.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a position by saying the trend is “extremely goes wrong,” and you give a relevant reason: people may avoid specialist doctors because medicines are easy to obtain. However, the response addresses the question only partially. It does not clearly explain whether the issue is alternative treatments specifically or self-medicating with ordinary tablets, and the example about a patient with blood cancer is introduced but not explained or connected to the argument. The response also contains only 118 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development of reasons or relevant examples. To strengthen the response, state your position clearly, explain the risks of replacing medical advice with alternative treatment, and develop a specific example showing the consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the first paragraph gives your view, and the second develops the point about online access and avoiding doctors. Linking expressions such as “In this era,” “Therefore,” and “For an example” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is limited, and the final example about blood cancer appears suddenly without explaining its relevance. Some links are also awkward or inaccurate, such as “because, of technology developments” and “owing to, an early time.” Use clearer paragraphing to separate your position, reasons, and example, and make each sentence follow logically from the previous one. More precise referencing and fewer forced connectors would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “pharmacies,” “medical stores,” “specialist doctors,” and “online delivery applications,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “every health issues have proper tablets,” “strong suggestions,” and “This makes very harmful.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “serups,” “Therfore,” “sufferring,” and “lukumeia.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand your point. Build a more precise set of health-related expressions and check spelling carefully; for example, distinguish between prescribed medication, self-medication, and alternative treatments.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a sentence using “owing to.” However, the range remains limited, and complex structures are often faulty. Examples include “Individuals are taking medicines … due to, every health issues,” “this is extremely goes wrong,” and “doctors are provide strong suggestions.” These show problems with clause construction, verb forms, and agreement. Punctuation also interrupts sentence flow, particularly the commas placed after “due to” and “because.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one clear subordinate clause at a time. For instance, express the view as “I believe this is a harmful development because doctors can identify the cause of a patient’s symptoms.”

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