Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays world majority of the people suffering from health deseases uses herbal and others methods to avoid going to professional doctors.

this process has impact both positive and negative one.but in my point of view this can lead you more dangerious situation in long term which i will discuss below.

first of all, nowadays increased number of patients recommend to stay at home while to go to the doctor just because doctors prescription fee are very higher not everyone can even afford them conveniently.which make harder for specifically for low income people to afford and continue treatement.moreover we can see its been too much time consuming process due to our lake of system in pakistan when you visit a doctor its take huge time for your number and if you come from your office or from very for away it will not possible to wait too much.

secondly,i think when alots of people having serious desease not recognise at starting time periods due to not visiting to doctors related to that illness you face lifeless experience which tend you to death.

in conclusion, our administration should take serious action on doctors fee structure

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position that relying on alternative treatment can be dangerous in the long term, and you give relevant reasons: the cost and time involved in seeing a doctor, and the risk that serious illnesses will not be identified early. However, the task asks whether this is a positive or negative development, and the response does not clearly assess alternative medicines themselves or balance the two sides suggested in the opening. The final recommendation about doctors’ fees is relevant but too brief to complete the argument. The response is also below the required 250 words, which limits how fully you can explain and support your ideas. Develop each reason with a clear example and state your judgement directly throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body points signalled by “first of all” and “secondly,” and a conclusion. The ideas are generally related to the topic, and the reader can follow the main concern about access to doctors. However, progression is limited: the first body paragraph combines cost and waiting time without clearly separating or developing them, while the second point is very short and the conclusion introduces an administrative solution abruptly. Some linking is mechanical, and punctuation and paragraphing make transitions harder to follow. Organise one main idea per paragraph, explain how each supports your position, and use linking phrases to show relationships rather than simply numbering points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “herbal,” “professional doctors,” “prescription fee,” and “serious disease,” so the subject is identifiable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make the message less clear, such as “deseases,” “dangerious,” “treatement,” and “lifeless experience.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “patients recommend to stay at home” and “doctors prescription fee are very higher.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and use a wider set of terms for the issue, such as “alternative remedies,” “medical consultation,” “early diagnosis,” and “healthcare costs.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason clause beginning “just because” and a conditional idea about visiting a doctor. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors can make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “majority of the people … uses” has problems with the article and subject–verb agreement, while “when you visit a doctor its take huge time” has errors in clause structure and verb form. Several sentences also run together without clear punctuation, particularly in the first body paragraph. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating independent clauses. Short, controlled sentences can establish accuracy before you add complex clauses.

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