Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Todays, a learg number of people with health issue are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. I think it 's have some advantages but sometime it's have some disadvantages.This is because, trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor work sometime while sometime it is dengerous.

One the on hand, trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor when a significant number of people with health problems it is beneficial. This is because, if people face smoll problems with health but they have not the opportunity to take hospital then trying alternative medicines and treatments are allowed. For example, when any area suffer from flooding that time they take a step for reduce health desease this situation. As a result, When people face helth issue such as, acidity, headeck that time it work well. Therefore, when a learg of people with smoll health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor this time it is a positive development.

One the other hand, sometime trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor happend negative development. The main reason is that , when any people have critical health issue then it dose not work and become more problem. As a result, sometime happend dath at a time for fake alternative medicines and treatments . Neverthless, trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor should noy allowed when people with critical helth problems.

In conclusion,trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor have both positive or a negative development. While In my opinion, people should visite their usual doctor.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the question by presenting both possible benefits and risks, and your final view—that people should visit their usual doctor—is identifiable. The examples of “acidity” and headaches give some relevant support, while the warning about critical health problems explains your concern. However, the position is not fully consistent: the introduction says there are advantages and disadvantages, but the conclusion does not clearly state whether the overall development is positive or negative. The flooding example is also difficult to connect to alternative treatment. Most ideas remain brief and general. The response contains 201 words, so it is 49 words below the required minimum; this limits the opportunity to develop and support your argument. Clarify your overall judgement and explain each example more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs beginning “One the on hand” and “One the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the intended organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several linking expressions are repetitive or awkwardly used, including repeated “This is because” and “As a result.” The flooding example does not connect clearly to the point about access to treatment, and references such as “this situation” are vague. The conclusion also repeats the topic rather than drawing the argument together. To improve, organise each paragraph around one clear claim, explain how its example supports that claim, and use fewer, more precise transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “alternative medicines,” “health problems,” “critical,” and “positive development,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, especially the long phrase about trying alternative treatments. Frequent spelling errors—such as “learg,” “dengerous,” “desease,” “headeck,” and “happend”—make reading difficult. Some word choices and combinations are also unclear, for example “smoll problems with health” and “take a step for reduce health desease.” Build a more accurate range for describing symptoms, access to care, and risks, and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated wording with concise alternatives will also make your argument easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, such as “This is because…” and “when people have critical health issue…,” but the longer structures are often faulty, and there is little accurate variety. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout: “it’s have,” “treatments … work,” and “it dose not work.” Articles and sentence construction are also frequently problematic, as in “when a significant number of people with health problems it is beneficial.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, making some sentences harder to process. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and complete sentence structure.

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