Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Health problem are the one of the biggest concern in today's time period every country is developing day by day in providing more and more jobs, education but their are some countries which are failed to provide in medical help and medicines to their society.

Nowadays, many people in different countries are facing many health problems like cancer, serious heart issues and many others also. But people are trying to solves these serious health problems with the help of doctors they mainly try home treatments or taking home made medicines which can be very dangerous for their life and health.

According to one report which was released in year 2023 by WHO that in a year millons of people are deing by cancer and lakhs are suffering from this serious health problem in United states and other parts of the world and they are providing more and more medicines, injections to governments so that their life can become safer.

Doctor plays a very crucial role in patients life because he has a acruate knowledge regarding the health problem and doctors make check ups so that they can give proper treatment. trying alternatives medicines and treatments instead visiting doctor can be a problem because doctor knows which medicines should give at what time.

So we should take doctors suggesting firtsly for any kind of medical problem at time of starting period so that we can take proper knowledge regarding problem and besr medicines to resolves the serious issues.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a generally clear negative position, especially when you warn that self-treatment “can be very dangerous” and argue that doctors can provide appropriate medicines and checks. These points are relevant, but the response only partially develops the task: it does not clearly compare alternative treatments with visiting a usual doctor, or explain when some alternatives might be safe or useful. The WHO reference is broad and its connection to the argument is not fully explained. The conclusion repeats the recommendation to consult doctors rather than drawing together developed reasons. The response is also three words below the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, state your position directly in the introduction and develop two specific reasons with clear examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from a general introduction to health problems, a report, the role of doctors, and a concluding recommendation. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the progression between ideas is not always clear: the discussion of countries’ medical provision in the opening does not lead smoothly into the later focus on self-treatment, and the WHO example is inserted without a clear link to the preceding point. Connectors such as “But,” “According to,” and “So” are used, but relationships between claims often need to be made more explicit. Some ideas are repeated, particularly the recommendation to seek doctors’ advice. Use each paragraph for one main reason and link its example directly to that reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “health problems,” “home treatments,” “medicines,” “injections,” and “proper treatment,” so the reader can follow the general subject. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “crucial role” and “serious heart issues.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or awkward expressions make parts of the argument less clear, including “acruate knowledge,” “doctors suggesting,” and “best medicines to resolves.” Spelling errors such as “millons,” “deing,” and “firtsly” are noticeable. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; for example, use “medical advice” rather than “doctors suggesting” and “alternative treatments” rather than “alternatives medicines.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a relative clause in “which can be very dangerous for their life and health” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “Health problem are” and “people are trying to solves”; articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “Doctor plays a very crucial role in patients life.” The sentence beginning “trying alternatives medicines” is a fragment, while the final sentence contains several errors that make its meaning difficult to follow. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly around the WHO report sentence. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause before attempting longer structures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.