Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Nowadays, people are rapidly getting aware about their health and in the other hand cure of treatment is almost pinnacle. In addition Due to population growth and as a repercussions if individual diagnose with any disease then they try to cure by themselves via alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting health professionals. I think this development consider to be negative and reasons behind my inclinations are elaborated in the trail paragraphs.

To begin with, in todays time due to advancements in the internet technology it is now easy find remedy for health problems easily and anyone can easily seek cure in the matter of clicks. However symptoms and severity of diseases might be different for each individual and each citizen requires personalize cure but since the information is static , the cure described on internet might be opaque and harmful for certain groups. For instance, impact of normal cold might be different on each person , some have a snoring nose or headache but the information on internet suggest to take high dose medicines like paracetamol which can easily cause damage to some patients.

Moreover, some high end illness have a same symptoms as regular disorders. For example, Corona and fever both have an almost similar impact on person's health but corona will do lethal damage to persons organs but some person mistaken this as a normal virus and try to find cure for fever on internet.

To sum up, alternative medicines and treatments might consider dangerous if person try to cure by him or her self.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that the trend is negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples like the internet and the confusion between COVID-19 and the common cold, the arguments remain relatively superficial. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the consequences of this trend, such as the public health implications or the psychological factors driving people away from doctors. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully summarize the main points presented in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' and 'To sum up.' However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'in the other hand' (which should be 'on the other hand') and 'in the trail paragraphs' (which is an unusual collocation). Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'cure of treatment is almost pinnacle' and 'high end illness.' Some phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'getting aware' instead of 'becoming aware' and 'snoring nose' instead of 'stuffy or runny nose.' While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range is limited, and there is a lack of flexibility in using less common lexical items to express complex ideas accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's flow. Examples include 'as a repercussions if individual diagnose' (should be 'as a repercussion if an individual is diagnosed') and 'might consider dangerous' (should be 'might be considered dangerous'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While you attempt complex structures, the control over them is inconsistent, leading to errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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