Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The numbers of health issues are increasing from recent years. Instead considering their family doctor they are taking alternative medicines and treatments. From my perspective it is a positive change in some circumstances but for major issues doctor are the good option. This essay will explain why.
In world most of the individuals are suffering with fever and cold so instead of doctor they started taking medicines which are natural such as taking neem decoction to imrovr immunity or applying wet cloth on the forehead to cool down the body temperature, and they have shown good results on people health. Moreover the turmeric is become more useful to give relief from pain. For instance, India is renowned in the field of ayurveda, this are the medicines which do not have the artificial chemicals it is completely natural, and individuals loved them and use them.
In contrast the crucial health problems such as cancer, anexiety, sugar etc. it needs proper treatment with consideration of doctor to recover. In addition the broken bones needs step by step procedure such as scanning, then medication. If we did not go to doctor for such issues it can cause negative impact on health or sometime it has chances of loosing a life. For instance, In Africa all citizens are depend on natural recovery process because of lack of hospitals that is why the Africa ranked number 1 in death cases around the world because of cancer.
In conclusion, today a counts of health issues are increasing in humans, so they are taking other options such as neem decoction, turmeric this are the best choice for small health problems while it comes to serious issues doctors help is must.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of alternative medicine. You have a clear position, stating that natural remedies are suitable for minor ailments while professional medical care is essential for serious conditions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The example regarding Africa is problematic as it relies on a sweeping, unsubstantiated generalization that may not be factually accurate or relevant to the core argument. To improve, ensure that your supporting examples are more universally applicable and logically sound. While the main points are relevant, the depth of analysis could be increased by exploring the underlying reasons for the shift toward alternative medicine more thoroughly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'In contrast', and 'In conclusion' to signal shifts in your argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the progression of ideas feels slightly disjointed. For example, the transition between the benefits of turmeric and the mention of India's ayurvedic tradition could be smoother. Additionally, the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'this are the medicines', which lacks a precise antecedent. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clearer pronoun references would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'ayurveda', 'immunity', and 'decoction'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the numbers of health issues are increasing from recent years' (instead of 'in recent years') and 'sugar' (to refer to diabetes). There are also spelling errors like 'imrovr' and 'anexiety'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your spelling is accurate, as these errors occasionally distract the reader from your argument.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'Instead considering their family doctor they are taking...' and 'If we did not go to doctor... it can cause'. There are frequent issues with article usage ('the doctor', 'a doctor'), subject-verb agreement ('this are the medicines'), and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the correct use of articles and verb tenses, before attempting more complex structures.
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