Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Todays, a growing numbers of citizens with health diseases are trying similars medicines and opreations instead of giong their usual doctor. I will give you my opinion positive or a negative.

To commence with, many people thinks alternative medicines are good for our health disease instead of going general physician. To Elaborate it, citizens who using alternative medicines he is good but now we should go to the doctor. For example my grandfather he is an old person and he beleives an old thinks before a week he serious sick with the problem of kidney damage all family says go for a family doctor but he said we should take alternative medicines they are good for our health he said tadays medicines are made with chemicals. He said chemicals are harmful for our body. Therfore, we should use alternative medicines instead of visiting general physician.

Furthermore, otherside people thinks we should go to a family doctor. He is good for our health. He can gives a good medicines for our problems. In other words, nowadays family doctors are very common and important for every city because every day people faced many problems related to our health like road accidend,heartattack,suger,low bloodpressure and many others. So, family doctor is important for all these disease.

In conculsion, the easy written about for the problems we faced in every day life. I agree with the second one because In my opnion visting to family doctor is important instead of alternative medicines. Nowadays tecehnology devolped many new opnions for save our life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the shift toward alternative medicine, but the development is limited. While you state your position in the conclusion, the body paragraphs lack a clear, sustained argument. The example of your grandfather is relevant but lacks sufficient analysis to support your stance effectively. The ideas are somewhat repetitive, and the response would benefit from more depth regarding why this trend is positive or negative. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your arguments are fully explained rather than just stated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To Elaborate it' and 'otherside people'. The logical flow between sentences is frequently disrupted by grammatical errors, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the subject of the sentences shifts abruptly. Improving the use of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'however' would help create a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'health diseases' instead of 'health problems', 'similars medicines' instead of 'alternative medicines', and 'opreations' instead of 'treatments'. Spelling errors are also prevalent throughout the text (e.g., 'tadays', 'accidend', 'suger', 'tecehnology'). To reach a higher band, you need to focus on using more precise vocabulary related to the topic and ensuring correct spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is the weakest area of this response. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many people thinks'), and article usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors that make the meaning unclear, such as 'In conculsion, the easy written about for the problems we faced in every day life.' Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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