Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the modern span, a significant people suffering from the "deceases" and they took medicines which is really bad for human body. As per my knowledge taking any kind of medicines without doctor opinion is really worst for body.
To begin with recent days, lots of pharma companies produce medicines in bulks due to that some times they can on pay attention on every section By means of which they produced effective medicines which is not good for health. Moreover, if someone suffering form deceases so he/she should meet doctor first instead of trying alternative medicines and treatments. Furthermore, for earing lots of money pharma companies made a drastic changes in medicines which is also a main reason of a growing number of people with health problems.
However, as per recent era government should take all the responsibility of that kind of corruption which is related to healthcare sector such as they should also build government hospital with good quality of medicines so all type of people can go there and take good healthcare facilities. Moreover, taking advice from the doctor is must be important thing for people because they can give actual medicines as per your deceases. If you take random medicines from local medical shop so there is high chance to do side effect.
In conclusion, if someone suffering from deceases so they should meet to the doctor according to the deceases and take medicines as per doctor guideline. taking alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor will negative impact on body.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that alternative medicine is a negative development. However, the development of ideas is limited. You focus heavily on the corruption of pharmaceutical companies rather than the core issue of why people choose alternative treatments or the specific risks/benefits of those treatments. The arguments are repetitive and lack depth, often relying on generalisations about 'deceases' (diseases) and 'random medicines'. To improve, you should provide more specific examples of what constitutes 'alternative medicine' and explain the implications of avoiding professional medical advice more thoroughly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'By means of which' is used incorrectly to connect ideas, and 'In the modern span' is an unnatural opening. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the link between pharmaceutical company profits and the choice of alternative medicine is not clearly explained. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow of your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. The word 'deceases' is used repeatedly instead of 'diseases', and 'earing' is used instead of 'earning'. Phrases like 'in the modern span' and 'in bulks' are non-standard. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common items accurately. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on correct word choice, spelling, and collocations. Expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to healthcare and medicine would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('medicines which is'), article usage ('meet doctor'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper control, such as 'if someone suffering form deceases so he/she should meet doctor first'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty and cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions.
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