Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this contemporary era, Most of the people face new problems related to their health due to this they try neumourous treatment from different doctors. Sometimes these treatments has huge negative impact on their mental as well as on physical health. The one coin had two side, I will discuss the both point before reaching the conrede dicision.
To start with, In today's time period so many different disseases are spreading in all over the world and people are unaware of it. The main reason behind health problems is juck food , stress, anxiety and depresion. Most of the people do over time work for stable future so some time they skip their sleep which leads to health issues such as headace, tiredness and lazzyness. Moreover, because of these health disorder they meet several doctors for cure.
In my point of view, I think it is better to visiting one doctor for treatment because they knew very well about their patients and their health issues. However, sometime it is possible that the regular doctores meadicine didn't work in your treatment so in this case patients will definately needs to go for alternative doctor for your cure. Furthermore, society use novel medicines from their local markets without consulting to doctor which latter create more health issues.
In conclusion, It is better to take advice from profesional dotors about their heath issues and always take best tereatment acoording to their problems.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt, the discussion is superficial and lacks depth. You mention both sides of the argument but do not provide sufficient examples or logical support to justify your position. The conclusion is brief and does not effectively summarize the main points. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. Transitions between sentences are often mechanical or missing, such as the abrupt shift in the second paragraph from causes of health issues to visiting doctors. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'The one coin had two side', which is an incorrect idiom. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary flow to guide the reader effectively through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'neumourous' (numerous), 'disseases' (diseases), 'juck' (junk), 'headace' (headache), 'lazzyness' (laziness), 'meadicine' (medicine), and 'profesional' (professional). These errors, combined with awkward phrasing like 'contemporary era' and 'do over time work', hinder the clarity of your writing. You need to focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise, academic terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'these treatments has' and 'society use'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors, such as 'because of these health disorder they meet several doctors for cure'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing or misplaced commas. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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