Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Health is a very important factor in everyones life because if you can take care of your health you will be suceeed in your life because now a days everyone is suffers with different health problems and diseases.Its all depends on your food and meals you takes in your daily routine.if you take a healthy meals and doing some exercises you will be healthy and active in your life but instead of this you may face different problems.Now a days everyone is suffer with different health issue and cannot visit to doctor to save time,money and others which creates a lot concerns about your health.Mostly people can use the medicine in your own ways or using alternative medication which may cause of other diseases.Its very harmfull for your health.Everyone is not having the same disease and not same health condition.If you have a pain in you chest does not mean you have a heart issue it will be a stomach problem due to gas trouble and acidity so if you treat in your own way yoy may take medicine related to heart issue which is very ingerious to health.So its very negative development about your health.I have seen moslty people can do the things like this which is dangerous to health.Now a days health is a important in everyones life so you have to go to hospital and concern with your usual doctor he will see you condition and after some dignasos they will refer to concern department or suggest medicine to cure your disease.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear negative stance on the development of using alternative medicines instead of visiting a doctor. The writer provides relevant ideas and examples, such as misdiagnosing chest pain as gas trouble versus a heart issue, which supports the overall position. However, the development of ideas tends to be repetitive and somewhat limited in scope, as the argument circles back to similar points regarding safety and proper diagnosis without deep elaboration. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of fully extended supporting arguments places this response firmly at the Band 5 level for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response exhibits severe issues with coherence and cohesion, primarily because it is written as a single, massive run-on paragraph. There is no use of conventional paragraphing to separate the introduction, body points, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, with phrases like 'now a days' and 'so' overused to link clauses awkwardly. The overall progression of ideas is hindered by this lack of structural organization. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow, which aligns with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses a basic and repetitive vocabulary range throughout the essay, relying heavily on simple terms like 'health', 'disease', and 'medicine'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'suceeed', 'harmfull', 'ingerious' (instead of injurious), and 'dignasos' (instead of diagnosis). These lexical limitations and errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and demonstrate a limited, minimally adequate range that fits the Band 5 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily compromised by run-on sentences, comma splices, and a lack of proper punctuation. The writer attempts some complex structures, but they are frequently faulty, such as in the sentence: 'If you have a pain in you chest does not mean you have a heart issue it will be a stomach problem...'. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone is suffers') and preposition use are evident throughout the text. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 4 grammatical performance.
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