Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

While myraid of individuals assert that still critics oppose the nais and believe that Nowdays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors.

Therefore, the many people are own self doctor because a new people are well educated and many types of medicine and people have a any type of problem in our body human are go to medical store and problem tell in dispancery boy he give the medicine people. The many medicine store are open all societies in small distances and any type of medical pills are avialable. Therefore, the people are relief in the medicine. people are save the doctor fees.

However, the many inbenifits our bodies because are well educated are does not go to doctor people are bring the medicine in the medical. The people body are many problems people body are do not digestive the food and run the dispancery boy are give the pills our according and medical persons are not study in the medicine beacause are eat the another medicine and people create the body problems many types of problems mases body kidneys are fail and store the water in stomach and people are not survive for many years because digestive system are fail and people are not eated food individual are day by day week and after death.

In conclusion, yes i am agree for this statement beacause god give only one life people have any problem in our body and individual are tell the problem to doctor are recommened the medicine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You do express a view: the conclusion says you agree that people should consult a doctor, and the body gives a relevant concern about taking medicine without professional advice. However, the position is difficult to follow because the opening is unclear and the conclusion does not directly state whether this trend is positive or negative. The supporting points are also confusing or insufficiently explained; for example, the discussion of kidney failure and digestive problems does not clearly show how these outcomes result from self-medication. The response contains 244 words, below the required 250; the 19 words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. To develop the response, state your position clearly, explain two relevant reasons, and support each with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an opening, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and words such as “Therefore” and “However” signal a contrast. These features give the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, ideas within the paragraphs are not arranged in a clear sequence, and connections between claims are often missing. For instance, the first body paragraph moves from people being educated to buying medicine and saving doctor fees without explaining the links. The second paragraph contains a long chain of claims about digestion, kidneys and death, making the main point hard to identify. Use one central idea per paragraph, develop it in a logical order, and use linking expressions only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses basic vocabulary related to the topic, including “doctor,” “medicine,” “pills” and “body problems,” so the general subject can be recognised. There are also attempts to express consequences, such as “save the doctor fees” and “kidneys are fail.” However, the vocabulary is highly repetitive and many word choices or forms make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the many inbenifits our bodies,” “dispancery boy” and “people are relief in the medicine” are unclear or inaccurate. Spelling errors, including “myraid,” “Nowdays” and “avialable,” further strain the reader. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to form longer sentences and use basic connectors, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors often distort meaning. For example, “people are own self doctor” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “people body are do not digestive the food” has problems with word order, verb form and agreement. Articles, plurals and subject–verb agreement are also often inaccurate, as in “the many people” and “kidneys are fail.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, and several sentences run together, especially in the paragraph describing health consequences. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join related ideas with a clear subordinate clause or conjunction.

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