Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in todays world, most of the people are taking medicines regurlary to recover from the health problem. most of the most thinks that it is an most effective way to live a life of joy instead of going to doctor . usally people beleive that this will be an good way to save money and time .

on the one hand , going hospital or visiting doctor will waste your precious time and it will make you tired . some people beleive that this is also an waste of money nad doctors are not an good advicers who treate them well. in addition, people can recover and get rid of any other desease by taking medicines regularlly which will make an person punctual. for example if a person is visiting hospital regurlarlly then it will be an problem for him because this can cause problem while travelling . Moreover, people usally prefer to stay home as they are too much lazzy and take medicine to recover from the problem.

on the other hand , taking medicine without having knowledge about that will directely damage your body inner system and will cause an serious health problem. as we know that every medicine has an side effect to health so it will be an foolish thing to take medicine without doctor instruction. most of the people beleive that taking medicine daily on time will make them fit and health but they do not know that they are hot tempered will be dangerious .

conclusion , on going world people now depend upon these medicine and they beleive that this is the only support of theor life thay are completely wrong beacuse they do not the real meaning of medicine and let that going to hospital will be the awaste of time and also the money . also they do not care about the problem they just beleive that they will recover automatically .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic and give reasons on both sides, including concerns about time and cost as well as the risks of taking medicine without medical advice. Your clearest relevant point is that self-medication may cause harm because medicines can have side effects. However, the response does not consistently answer whether the growing use of alternative treatments instead of visiting a usual doctor is positive or negative. Much of the discussion shifts to taking medicines regularly, which is not necessarily the same as using alternative treatments, and the final position is difficult to identify. To strengthen the response, state your view clearly in the introduction and conclusion, then develop a few directly relevant reasons with specific explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted with “on the one hand” and “on the other hand,” and a conclusion, so there is a basic attempt to organise the discussion. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because ideas within paragraphs are loosely connected or repeated. For example, the first body paragraph moves from time and cost to regular medicine use, punctuality, travel, and laziness without explaining how each point supports the argument about alternative treatments. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “in addition” are used, but they do not always show a clear relationship between ideas. Group related points, use clearer references, and make each paragraph develop one central argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to health and treatment, including “side effect,” “health problem,” “recover,” and “doctor instruction.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly references to medicine, doctors, and recovery. Frequent spelling errors such as “regurlary,” “beleive,” and “desease,” along with inaccurate or unnatural phrases such as “live a life of joy” and “damage your body inner system,” make parts of the message difficult to understand. Some word choices also do not express the intended meaning clearly, as in “they are hot tempered will be dangerious.” Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations so your ideas can be communicated reliably.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “as,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement appear in examples such as “most of the most thinks” and “they are hot tempered will be dangerious,” while article use is often inaccurate in phrases such as “an good way” and “an serious health problem.” Verb forms and sentence boundaries also need attention; for instance, “conclusion, on going world people now depend” does not form a clear, complete opening sentence for the conclusion. These frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with subordinate clauses and check articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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