Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this fast and furious era, everything has been changing so frequently that it is the cause which is responsible for alteration even in our thoughts and objectives. I am in the agreement that as we get mature, our thoughts and way of thinking also get changed. To illustrate my viewpoint, I will be giving some solid reasons along with some examples in subsequent paragraphs.

First and foremost, I think that in childhood, children live in an imaginary world, where they make a lot of assumptions about life and the people around them according to their own perspective, which is immature and not directly connected with reality. To elaborate on this, A strict teacher is always taken as a monster by small children, who always punish them and interrupt them when they are wrong. So they take him the wrong way; however, when they grow up and enter their teenage years, only then do they realise the importance of that kind of teacher because of the maturity in their thinking and by observing their surroundings. Next, as we get older, we gain experience of life by facing some vicious realities of it. When we enter the real world, sometimes it is the opposite of our imagination. For instance, last year I was selected by a reputed local business as a manager just because of my previous experience and eligibility, so I was extremely excited for my first day of work; however, it took no more time to turn into disappointment, as the work culture was not as I expected; everyone there was so annoyed and dissatisfied to talk to me .

To conclude, I would say that it is a natural phenomenon that, with the passage of time, we all change, and our thoughts and goals also change. It happens because of experience, maturity in our thoughts, and scientifically, too. As we grow, our brains also grow and help us to calculate things more clearly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that people’s thinking changes as they mature, and you give relevant reasons involving childhood assumptions, experience, and maturity. The teacher example illustrates how a child’s view can change over time, while your workplace story shows how expectations may be revised through experience. However, the response focuses much more on opinions and thinking than on changes in habits, which is also explicitly part of the question. The workplace example is relevant but its connection to changing habits or opinions could be explained more directly. Develop both parts of the topic with balanced examples, and clarify how each example supports your overall view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, the body develops examples, and the conclusion restates your position. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “To elaborate on this,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the argument. The ideas are generally understandable, but some linking feels mechanical, and the long body paragraph combines several points without a clear break. The transition from the teacher example to the workplace story could also explain more explicitly how the second example develops the same argument. Use separate paragraphs for distinct reasons and connect examples to the main claim with more precise referencing, rather than relying mainly on formulaic signposts.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary and attempt some less common expressions, including “imaginary world,” “vicious realities,” and “work culture.” These choices help communicate your examples, and the meaning remains clear overall. However, several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “I am in the agreement,” “get mature,” and “it took no more time to turn into disappointment.” Some wording is also unnecessarily elaborate, as in “the cause which is responsible for alteration.” Aim for more natural collocations and precise language, especially when stating your position and describing change. A few carefully chosen terms will make the argument sound more fluent than ornate phrasing does.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses and contrast structures, as in the sentence beginning “A strict teacher is always taken as a monster…” and the contrast introduced by “however.” Most of the meaning is accessible, but some grammatical errors and punctuation issues remain. For example, “as we get mature” and “our thoughts and way of thinking also get changed” show problems with verb patterns and natural sentence construction. The long sentence about your first day at work is difficult to control, and the space before the full stop in “to me .” is incorrect. Break lengthy sentences into clearer units and check verb forms, articles, agreement, and punctuation while retaining your complex structures.

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