Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often said that when people get older they change their habits and opinions. I completely agree with this statement because people learn from experience and they also have more responsibilities.

One reason is that people's opinions change because of experience. When we are young we don't know much about life. But as when we get older we work and meet different people. Because of this our ideas can change. For example when i was young i thought studying was very boring but now i realised that studying is very important part of our lives because studying is responsible for getting a good job for us.

Another reason is that habits change when we get older because of health and family. Young people often stay up late and feel energized at night. However older people think more about their health. Also when people have children they should change their habits for them. For instance many families in provinces here in the Philippines wake up early just to prepare food and wake up early. So their daily habits become different.

In conclusion i agree that most people change their habits and opinions as they get older this is because of life expirience and because of family responsibilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I completely agree”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You address both habits and opinions, giving relevant reasons about experience, health, and family responsibilities, with personal and local examples. However, the ideas are not developed equally: the example about studying explains how your opinion changed, but the link between having children and changing habits is asserted rather than explored. The family example also repeats “wake up early” without showing in detail how this illustrates a broader change. The response is 43 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to extend your explanations. Develop each example with a specific detail and explain how it supports your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. The progression from changing opinions to changing habits is easy to follow, and signposts such as “One reason,” “Another reason,” and “In conclusion” make the organisation clear. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger progression. However, linking is sometimes mechanical, with repeated “because” and “For example/For instance,” and the sentence beginning “But as when we get older” disrupts the flow. The final family example also repeats the idea of waking early. Use a wider range of natural transitions and make each sentence add a distinct point; clearer links between examples and claims would make cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “responsibilities,” “energized,” and “daily habits.” The wording is generally understandable, but the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise. “Studying is responsible for getting a good job for us” uses an unnatural collocation, while “people learn from experience” and “change their habits” are repeated without much variation. There are also spelling and capitalization slips, including “expirience” and lowercase “i”; these belong to vocabulary and written word-form control rather than grammar. Aim for more precise phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, describe how experience “shapes people’s views” rather than simply saying their ideas change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate your argument using a mix of short statements and some longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “however.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “But as when we get older” combines two incompatible structures, and “studying is very important part” is missing an article. The sentence “when i was young i thought…” also needs capitalization and clearer punctuation to separate its clauses. Your conclusion would be more accurate with punctuation between the main claim and its explanation. Practise building complex sentences with one clear clause pattern at a time, and check articles, sentence boundaries, and capitalization during proofreading.

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