Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemproary era, where people are changing within every single minute. It is generally contended that people mind sets are also altering as they become old. As far as I am concerned, I fully acord with this statement as with experience individual's way of thinking is changed and suffering from situations make up their mind to do some changes in their behaviour.

Firstly, every single day teachs a lesson, it might be good or bad, but teaching us how to cope with problems and deal with people on a regular basis. Similarly, an individual ability to act according to situations has been changed accordingly, because they witness problems and hurdles and learn from them, like what mistake they made and what they want to update intheir life for better upcoming. With this continous efforts and experience a person alters their's habits. As a consequence, person become more understandable with age, by knowing what is good for them or which constructive habits they should indulge in their lifestyle to become superior.

Secondly, with age person's thinking ability get its full potenial and they become more intellactual. In other words, when people become old, they had an invaluable experience which guide them with the best and they try to resolve every issue by considering the pros and cons , as compared to youngsters who take decison on the intense without evaluating the risk factors because they do not think for long term.

Some may argue that when human being become old their neurons connections become weak and they do overthinking on every topic and become neutral on it, while I believe they prefer to take calculated risk on all problems they faced by comparing it with past.

In nutshell, I would say it is commonly seen in old people's behavior

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you fully agree that people’s habits and opinions change with age. You give relevant reasons, including learning from daily experiences and becoming more considered when making decisions, and the comparison with younger people helps explain your view. However, the discussion of opinions is less fully developed than the discussion of habits, and several claims remain broad. For example, “every single day teaches a lesson” could be supported with a specific example showing how an experience changes someone’s opinion or behaviour. The final sentence, “it is commonly seen in old people’s behavior,” does not provide a complete conclusion or restate your reasoning. Develop both aspects of the prompt more evenly and finish with a clear summary of your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure: an introduction, two main points, a counterargument and a concluding attempt. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In other words” help readers follow the argument. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The sentence beginning “Some may argue” introduces a contrasting view, but the response does not explain how this point relates to the earlier discussion before returning to your own position. Several long sentences also combine multiple ideas, making the progression harder to follow. The final paragraph is only a fragment of a conclusion, so the essay ends abruptly. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and give the conclusion its own complete, summarising statement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “experience,” “hurdles,” “constructive habits,” “invaluable,” and “calculated risk.” These choices show an effort to express ideas beyond basic language. However, inaccurate word forms, spelling and collocations sometimes make the meaning less natural, as in “people mind sets,” “full potenial,” “intellactual,” and “take decison on the intense.” Some expressions are also vague or awkward, such as “become superior” and “update in their life.” Aim for precise, natural combinations rather than using ambitious words where the meaning is uncertain. Proofreading spelling and checking common collocations would make your vocabulary more effective and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “while,” and this gives the response some structural variety. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “every single day teachs a lesson” needs a correctly formed verb, while “person become more understandable” has an agreement problem. The opening, “In this contemproary era, where people are changing within every single minute,” is a sentence fragment, and “when people become old, they had” shifts tense inconsistently. Some sentences also run together several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate complete sentences first, then extend them with subordinate clauses and check agreement and tense consistency.

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