Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Yes, it is. because the research said people learn things day by day , so it will happen normally when people change their habits like even some people change thier favourite things, their goals , their profession their likes and dislikes.As a matter of fact the once you get old its difficult to handle some of hard situations, so people quit their dream job or profession. The thought also changed the vision of thinking almost changed.

In the young age people have stemna and full of energy they learn things quickly and they handle difficult things easily, but in old age mostly people less of energy always feel weakness and laziness.

for instance , my father he is retired engineer. he love engineering field and profession a lot , but he now is changed.Several of jobs he join after a month he resign.This is a real example of habit change.Another example one of my uncle paint houses and he is plumber too.Now, at the age of 55 he refuses to do this and said i am old now i can superwise ,but can't do this. Infact these are real ones my opinions is people change their habits when they get old.

one more example one of my aunt is a gym instructor she quite her profession and said to us i am getting old i can't do this anymore.

In conclusion, we know the reason is that in old age people get ill and weak ,so some time they change their habits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear general agreement that people change as they age, and the examples about your father, uncle, and aunt make the response relevant to the question. However, the task asks about changes in both habits and opinions, while most of your discussion concerns leaving jobs or physical activities. The point that “the vision of thinking” changes is mentioned but not explained or supported with an example, so one part of the task remains only partially addressed. The reasons are also quite limited: reduced energy and illness are repeated, rather than developed into distinct explanations. To strengthen the response, explain how ageing can alter a person’s beliefs or priorities and connect each example directly to the claim.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall shape: it states a position, gives examples, and ends with a conclusion. The examples are generally relevant, and phrases such as “for instance” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the writing. However, progression is uneven: the opening moves quickly between research, changing preferences, jobs, and thinking without clearly linking these points. The examples are also presented one after another with little explanation of how they support the main reason. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “another example” and “one more example.” Use separate paragraphs for reasons and examples, and add clear references that show how each example illustrates a change in habits or opinions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main idea, including “habits,” “profession,” “retired,” and “energy.” The personal examples also give you opportunities to use relevant terms about work and ageing. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the vision of thinking,” “full of energy,” and “real ones my opinions.” Spelling errors, including “thier,” “stemna,” “superwise,” and “quite” where you mean “quit,” also make the writing less clear. Aim to use more precise phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe changing priorities, reduced stamina, or reconsidering a career rather than relying on repeated references to getting old.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main position using mostly simple sentence patterns, and you attempt some longer structures, for example, “when people change their habits” and “when they get old.” However, the range is limited, and longer sentences are often difficult to follow because of errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, and articles. Examples include “my father he is retired engineer,” “he love engineering,” and “he now is changed.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “Yes, it is. because” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement and past or present forms.

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