Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
As for individuals, it is fairly normal to shift both their habits and believes as they mature. I firmly agree to this statement and in this essay i will discuss the possible reason for this changes.
On the first hand, being a child are tend to have a lack of knowledge of almost everything. Childrens mind set are usualy focus on colorful toys and curious about a lot of things around them. For instance, if you give book and candy to the youngsters, there is a high chance that they choose candy over the others. It is for the reason that they did not aware the true value of book and they much familiar with the candy. Their thinking are simple and not to far. Meaning, what is available matter.
On the second hand, getting to know more and aware to what possible we may encounter in the future make our dicission with more caution. And this is one of the reason why people shift from habits to another. It also include opinions, believes and interest in life. So
m changes may cause by who we are with. The surounding has a huge factor that need to be consider when comes to change.
In conclusion, shifting habits and opinions are base on maturity and environment that affect one personality.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
Your position is clear: you agree that habits and opinions change with age, and you give relevant reasons involving children’s limited understanding and the influence of people and surroundings. The book-versus-candy example helps illustrate how priorities can change. However, the response addresses the topic only partially: the discussion of opinions is brief, and the second reason is asserted rather than explained with a specific example. The conclusion repeats the main point without drawing the reasons together. The response also contains 219 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development to fully support your position. Extend each reason with a concrete example and explain how it demonstrates change over time.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the two main reasons. However, progression within the paragraphs is not always clear. Phrases such as “On the first hand” and “On the second hand” are inaccurate transitions, while “So /m changes” interrupts the flow and makes the connection between ideas difficult to follow. Some points are repeated, particularly the references to habits, opinions and change, without being linked through clear explanation. Use straightforward transitions such as “First” and “Another reason,” and make each paragraph follow a clear sequence: state the reason, explain it, then give an example. Check that pronouns and linking phrases clearly refer to the intended idea.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use a limited but relevant range of vocabulary, including “mature,” “caution,” “environment” and “personality,” which helps communicate the general topic. However, noticeable errors in word choice, word form, spelling and collocation sometimes make the meaning less clear. Examples include “believes” for “beliefs,” “usualy,” “dicission,” and “surounding”; “shift from habits to another” is also an unnatural expression. Some wording is vague, such as “what is available matter” and “the surounding has a huge factor.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “change their habits,” “make more cautious decisions,” and “the people around us can influence our views.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise collocations would make your ideas easier to understand.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, but the range is limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in examples such as “being a child are tend to have” and “Childrens mind set are usualy focus.” Other sentences have missing or incorrect grammatical elements, as in “they did not aware” and “what is available matter.” These errors can make the reader pause to work out the intended meaning. There are also problems with sentence boundaries and capitalisation, including the lowercase “i” and the fragment “Meaning, what is available matter.” Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using patterns such as “because,” “when” and “as.”
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