Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent times, it has been observed that when people are getting older, they try to change their not only habits, but also their opinions. I strongly agree with the above statement, which I am going to discuss in the upcoming paragraph of this essay.

To commence with, when people were young they were living their life freely without any restriction and fear by eating fast food, watching movies and shows till late night, but when they start getting old they realise to their lifestyle by consuming healthy and nutritional food as well as to sleep on time. Moreover, they also understand the importance of money and family, so that those people started doing jobs fulfill their family needs and also to provide better lifestyle to them by making ample amount of money. For instance, when people are mature enough they try to avoid harmful thing from their to remain focused and healthy.

Furthermore,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your position is clear: “I strongly agree,” and the discussion gives relevant examples of changing eating and sleeping habits as people mature. The point about recognising the importance of money and family also begins to address how priorities and opinions may change. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it gives little explanation of changing opinions, and the final paragraph stops after “Furthermore,” without developing another reason or example. The required minimum length is not met, which contributes to the limited development. To strengthen the response, explain a specific change in belief or attitude, support it with a concrete example, and complete the essay with a conclusion that restates your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction states your view, followed by a paragraph about lifestyle and family responsibilities. Linking phrases such as “To commence with,” “Moreover,” and “For instance” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is limited because the response ends with the unfinished “Furthermore,” and there is no developed second point or conclusion. Some connections are also unclear: the sentence about making money moves quickly from understanding family’s importance to employment without explaining the link. Organise the essay into complete paragraphs, each with one main idea and supporting explanation, and use transitions to show the relationship between those ideas rather than relying mainly on formulaic openers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main topic, including “healthy and nutritional food,” “importance of money and family,” and “harmful thing.” There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “I strongly agree” and “ample amount.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “realise to their lifestyle” does not clearly express the intended idea, and “harmful thing” is vague. “Getting old” is repeated, while the response offers few varied terms for maturity or changing beliefs. Choose more precise expressions and check how words combine; for example, describe people as adopting healthier habits or avoiding harmful behaviours. This would make the argument clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast between youth and later life and a sentence beginning “Moreover.” Some basic sentence meanings are understandable, but control is uneven, particularly in longer structures. For example, “when people were young they were living their life freely” shifts awkwardly between past forms, and “those people started doing jobs fulfill their family needs” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the actions. The opening phrase “when people are getting older” also sits awkwardly with the general present-tense claim. Practise forming clear clauses with consistent tense, accurate verb patterns, and appropriate articles and plurals. Shorter, well-controlled sentences would help you express the ideas reliably before adding more complex structures.

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