Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued, that some people change both their habits and their opinions as they get older. I completely agree with this view because of their age and econimic growth.

The main reason is, oldage and the experience they had which turned to be life changing events. This made a shift in there opinion on life in general. Many get life threathing diseases like cancer and some get hormonal changes like diabeties, cholestrol. Once they get these, they tend to make a shift in there lifestyle in a serious manner, which they might have ignored back ten years. For instances, many oldage communities have adapted a habit of sleeping early, eating light meals which are easy for digestion. Large portion of people on older age, have opted for Yoga session, as it was in trendsetter as well as they learned a positive opinion on health benefits. Hence, looking at surrounding and ongoing trends, people usually alter regular chores at this older age.

Another reason is the source of ecomonical growth which is limited, as the main source of income is through pensions or they are depended on their families. It is often observed that, the older the people makes a wiser decision with the financiale handling. Its gets more better once they age. For example, habits like uncessary shopping, taking risk on financial fronts are largely rejected. They often change their outlook and prespective of life when they grow old. They have very promitent opinion on future and family well beging, which was not much clear in early adulthood days.

In conclusion, I strongly beleive, that some people change both their habits and their opinions as they get older because limited funds to lives a sustainable life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you completely agree that people change their habits and opinions as they age. You address both aspects, linking lifestyle changes to illness and health awareness, and changing views to financial limits and family wellbeing. These examples are relevant, but the explanation is uneven and sometimes unclear. For instance, the discussion of yoga and “ongoing trends” does not fully show how opinions change, while the financial paragraph focuses more on spending habits than on the reasons older people develop different opinions. The conclusion also introduces limited funds as the main reason, although the essay gives health and experience substantial attention. Develop each reason more directly and keep the conclusion consistent with the argument above it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through your argument, and phrases such as “The main reason” and “Another reason” signal the paragraph topics. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several points are placed together without clear links. The first body paragraph moves from illness to sleeping and eating habits, then yoga and trends, without explaining each connection fully. Some references, such as “Once they get these,” are not precise, and repeated uses of “they” can make the subject unclear. Use clearer links between cause, example, and effect, and make references explicit rather than relying on repeated pronouns.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “life changing events,” “lifestyle,” “financial,” and “family wellbeing,” and you attempt more specific expressions such as “financial fronts.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “econimic growth” where you appear to mean financial circumstances, “oldage communities,” and “financiale handling.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “threathing,” “cholestrol,” “prespective,” and “beleive.” These errors reduce precision and sometimes interrupt reading. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and word forms carefully; prefer natural combinations such as “manage their finances” and “change their outlook on life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “events which turned to be life changing” and a conditional structure in “Once they get these, they tend to make a shift.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “The main reason is, oldage and the experience they had which turned…” is not a complete, well-formed sentence, while “the older the people makes a wiser decision” has faulty agreement and structure. Other problems include “Its gets more better” and “because limited funds to lives a sustainable life,” where the sentence pattern is incomplete or inaccurate. Practise forming complete sentences, checking subject–verb agreement, and using articles and verb forms consistently.

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