Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There are several changes occur with aging. Some people usually change their pastime and their decision in later age. I agree with this view because of flexibility and they adjust themselves according to current era.

The most significant reason behind this is that most of the people are more resilient in their nature with increasing age and they want to do something new because they feel bore by doing same activities repeatedly. Furthermore, some individuals start doing different hobbies like painting instead of reading that they were used to do in their their adulthood. A clear illustration of this is that, a greater proportion of older people in various countries start spending more time in worshiping of God because they think they spent their younger age in doing bad deeds.

Another crucial reason for this is that many senior individuals also adjust their decision according to the era because of cognitive or emotional changes. Moreover, they commonly change their strict decisions according to the situation. Consequently, some people strictly follow their own rules like in Pakistan some young parents have influence their decision on their children but when they get older they do not consider their own decision as a final decision. For instance, some parents have their own rules and regulations for marriages of their children and they do not like love marriages or engagements in out of caste people but in their later ages they give permission to their children that they choose their partner itself.

In conclusion, I agree that in older age the humans are most commonly change their routine and also their opinions because they develop more flexibility in older age and they want to move according to the variations in a modern era.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you agree that people change their habits and opinions as they age. You address both parts of the prompt, giving examples of changing hobbies and of parents becoming more accepting of their children’s marriage choices. These examples are relevant, and the family example is particularly specific. This meets the task well, while the explanation of why older people take up new hobbies is less convincing: the claim that they are “more resilient” does not clearly explain the change, and the worship example is generalised. To strengthen the response further, explain the causes more precisely and show how each example supports your view, rather than relying on broad claims about older people.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion that restates your position. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “Consequently” help signal relationships between ideas. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Consequently” does not clearly show how the preceding point leads to the example about parents, and the shift from resilience to boredom could be explained more smoothly. Some references are also imprecise, such as “their decision” when it is not immediately clear whose decision is meant. Use fewer formulaic transitions and make the relationship between each claim, explanation, and example explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “resilient,” “cognitive or emotional changes,” “strict decisions,” and “variations in a modern era.” These choices show an attempt to express more than basic ideas. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “feel bore,” “in their adulthood,” “worshiping of God,” and “move according to the variations” do not convey your meaning naturally. There is also repetition of “decision” and “change.” Aim to learn vocabulary in common word partnerships and choose precise terms—for example, describe people as becoming “more open-minded” rather than “more resilient” if you mean they become more accepting of change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “that,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “There are several changes occur” needs a relative clause or a different structure, while “the humans are most commonly change” has an incorrect verb pattern. In “some young parents have influence their decision,” the verb form is also inaccurate, and “they choose their partner itself” has problems with pronoun agreement and clause structure. Review basic sentence patterns and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb. More accurate complex sentences would improve control.

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