Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often believed that age has huge impact on the personality of person. A major proportion of society contends that it is very prevalent for individuals to change their habits and opinions as they get older. I strongly agree with the stated statement which will be explicated in the following paragraph.

Initially, people change their eating habits and daily routine when they are getting older due to various problems such as medical issues. For instance, now-a-days diabetes is a major issue among older people, which restrict them from eating sugar. Apart from this, there is cholestrol and hypertension problem due to which they cannot eat fried food and start following healthy lifestyle also prefer to go on walk twice a day for the betterment of their health.

Secondly, after fulfill responsibilities of their families they finally get time for themselves. Then some old people prefer to do all the works that they were not able to do in their young age. For example, some plan to go on trips and various prefer to enjoy their me-time according to their own preferences.

Furthermore, there opinions are also getting change regarding life.Because in young age they prefer to work more and always think about achieving success, also prefer to settle down in cities. However, as the time passes the hustling and bustling life of cities getting irritate them. Another factor is the behaviour of an individual also change with their age and their experiences.

In conclusion, age affect the daily routine and eating habits of the individuals because of health related issues and the change in behaviour and the experiences change their opinion as they getting are older.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I strongly agree,” and the response addresses both habits and opinions. The examples about dietary changes linked to diabetes and other health concerns are relevant, as is the contrast between working and city life when younger and seeking different priorities later. These points support your view, but they are not equally developed: the second body paragraph mentions trips and “me-time” without explaining how these illustrate changing habits or opinions, and the final point about experience changing behaviour is asserted rather than supported. To strengthen the response, explain the reasons behind each change and add a specific example showing how an older person’s priorities or views have shifted over time. This would make the argument more consistently developed and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, three body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas generally move from health-related habits to leisure and changing opinions. Connectors such as “Initially,” “Secondly,” and “Furthermore” help signal this progression. However, some links feel mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is not always clear. For example, the paragraph about family responsibilities moves quickly from having more free time to trips and personal preferences, without explicitly linking these examples to the main claim. The sentence beginning “Because in young age” is also attached awkwardly to the preceding point. Use clearer topic sentences and transitions that show cause and contrast, and make references such as “their opinions” unambiguous. This would make the progression smoother and cohesion less dependent on formulaic signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “medical issues,” “responsibilities,” “preferences,” and “hustling and bustling.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “for the betterment of their health.” However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “a major proportion of society contends” is an awkward way to introduce the view, and “the hustling and bustling life of cities getting irritate them” does not express the idea naturally. Spelling errors such as “cholestrol” and “now-a-days” also reduce accuracy. Aim for simpler, more natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you express the distinction between changing routines, priorities and opinions without relying on broad or awkward phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including explanations with “when” and “due to,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, grammatical control is uneven, with errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. For example, “diabetes … which restrict them” needs a singular verb, while “after fulfill responsibilities” requires a different verb form and an article or possessive. In “their opinions are also getting change,” the verb pattern is incorrect, and “as they getting are older” has an inaccurate verb sequence. Some punctuation and spacing also make sentences harder to follow, as in “life.Because.” Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, and revise complex sentences so that clauses are joined accurately. This would improve accuracy while preserving your range.

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