Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Changing their mind and life routine is usual for people who is becoming older. I totally

disagree with this statement. It is more difficult to change their already accepted lifecycle and thoughts.

One of the reasons is elderly people do not like replace their regular habits. They do same things such as eat certain meal, watch the scheduled TV program and take same medicine. Moreover, older people prefer their familiar routine because they feel safe and comfortable. For exampe, someone smoked last 30 years, it is not easy to quit smoking even doctor advises about health problem. Also, person who want to change healthy

. It is almost impossible to their lifestyle; it s require more effort to change it.

Althought, changing and maniplating their mind is more challenging especially political and society opinions. Because their mind already set from young age. For example, many aged people disagree with same gender relationship; when they were young, they did not have this thought and their society and community never had this kind of relationship.They never used to it. As a result, it is difficult to change.

In conclusion, the biggest challenge is changing older people's opinion and life habits. Most of the old people feel safe and secure for their regular lifecycle. It is too risky to try new habits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you disagree that people commonly change their habits and opinions as they age, and you give relevant examples involving smoking and attitudes to same-sex relationships. However, the response only partially develops the task. The smoking example supports the point about habits, but the sentence beginning “Also, person who want to change healthy” is unfinished, so this idea is not explained. The opinion example is also broad and would be stronger with a specific explanation of how an older person’s view might remain unchanged. The response is 31 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your reasons. Explain each example fully and add a relevant personal or observed experience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The reader can identify the main topics: habits first, then opinions. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “For example,” and “As a result.” However, progression within the first body paragraph breaks down at “Also, person who want to change healthy” and the isolated full stop, making the argument difficult to follow. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, particularly the opening “Although” of the second body paragraph, which does not lead into a contrasting point. The conclusion repeats the main claim rather than drawing the reasons together. Use complete paragraphs and sentences, and make each linking phrase express the relationship between ideas accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general argument, including “regular habits,” “familiar routine,” “comfortable,” and “opinions.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “scheduled TV program” and “same gender relationship.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or awkward choices make parts of the response hard to understand. “Lifecycle” does not clearly mean a person’s established way of life, while “maniplating their mind” is not an appropriate expression for changing opinions. Spelling errors such as “exampe” and “Althought” are noticeable, and “healthy” is incomplete in context. Build a more precise set of phrases for habits and attitudes, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason introduced by “because” and examples introduced by “such as.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “people who is becoming older” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “They do same things” is missing an article. The sentence “someone smoked last 30 years” has an unclear tense and time expression, and “it s require more effort” contains errors in both the pronoun and verb form. The unfinished sentence beginning “Also, person who want to change healthy” further affects clarity. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then check agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence completion.

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