Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I would like to discuss my opinion about this very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

first, some children in the past has a younger experience about the community and some problems that the country is facing off. That is why the habits that they have is related only on what they see in their community. For example, I live in province, I only see a simple life like going to mountauins, going lake and do some fishing and for me this is life! that is whay my habit is go fishing. But when i get older i see the difference in my town, the work is hard to find, many problems is on the way even you dont want it. That is why the habit that i built in my younger days was replace when i got realize the truth about my town. Its thesame about the opinion. For example, when i am a teenager i only know about my school i did not dare to join in baranggay activity. That is why my opinion for them is not the same when I am getting older, simply because i see the problem in my baranggay.

To wrap this up, I am agree about this matter beause I experience this change of my opinion and my habit in my past childhood going to be an adult.My habit in my childhood is swimming and going to mountain not carring about my future, when i get older, i see that i need to change tha way i am used to. My hoby now is riding and goin to places. Thesame in my opinions, it changes when i get older. that is the reason why i agree to this matter.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that habits and opinions can change with age, and you give personal examples involving fishing, work in your town, and becoming more aware of community problems. These examples are relevant, so the response addresses the question. However, the explanation is only partly developed. For instance, you say that your childhood habit was replaced after you realised the truth about your town, but you do not explain precisely what changed in your behaviour or why. The opinion example is also brief, and the conclusion mostly repeats your position. To strengthen the response, explain the causes and effects of each change more fully and make the link between growing older and changing views explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening, a main paragraph with examples, and a concluding paragraph. Sequencing phrases such as “first,” “For example,” and “To wrap this up” help signal the stages of your argument. However, progression is limited because habits and opinions are discussed together in a long main paragraph, and several ideas are repeated in the conclusion rather than developed further. Some links are unclear, such as the move from childhood fishing to difficulties finding work. Use separate paragraphs for habits and opinions, and connect each example to the main claim with a clear explanation. More precise referencing would also help readers follow what “them” and “this matter” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough familiar vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “community,” “problems,” “opinion,” and “experience.” Personal details such as fishing and swimming make the examples understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “when I get older” and “That is why.” Some word choices or combinations are unclear, for example “see the truth about my town” and “my habit … was replace.” Spelling errors such as “mountauins,” “whay,” and “hoby” also make the writing less clear. Build a wider set of expressions for describing changing attitudes and routines, and check spelling and natural word combinations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using words such as “because,” “when,” and “that is why,” and the reader can generally understand your main point. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. Examples include “some children … has,” “the habits … is related,” and “I am agree.” Tense shifts also make the timeline difficult to follow, as in “when I am a teenager” followed by “when I am getting older.” Practise forming accurate past-tense sentences to describe childhood and later changes, and check subject–verb agreement. Breaking some long sentences into shorter, correctly punctuated ones will improve clarity.

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