Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modern age where people grow and become mature, they easily give and takeaway their habits and opinions. I also agree that people must change their thoughts and lifestyle so that they could aim a lot of things better than before.

First, technology is one of the most influencial thing that persuades people because they get a lot of information even the essential ideas where it can lead it to changing their plans, decisions or dreams. Moreover, browsing to any social media platform, may introduce them to change their goals and to make it better. For instance, some people nowadays want to build a simple home like a bungalo house, however when they watch a lot of video about how to build a budgetarian house that is like a modern one with two-storey structure, they aim to have it also. because of that changing their thingking is a good thing.

Futhermore, there are also some who change their lifestyle, especially those who goes to gym everyday because they want to have a good figure or shape. Some of them after meeting strangers who are well known when it comes to physical health. For example, gym coach, a doctor who is also a body builder and nutritionist that is knowledgable about what to eat to help our body gain a lot of weights or muscles. In that way, people will change their perspective and their habits to their body or at anything, resulting to have a better routine.

In conclusion, changing the opinions or plans provide a positive impact to themselves, where they could fix and change anything to make it much better, and sometimes people need their advice and insight from others so that they could gain a lot of confidence to do it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that people change their opinions and habits as they grow older, and you give relevant examples involving social media, housing aspirations and exercise. These examples show an attempt to explain why change happens. However, the response only partly develops the task: the discussion focuses mainly on outside influences, rather than explaining how getting older itself leads people to change. The housing example is also difficult to follow, and the conclusion introduces seeking advice and confidence without developing those points in the body. To strengthen the response, explain the connection between age and changing priorities or experience, and extend each example with a clear explanation of its effect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “First” and “Furthermore,” and a conclusion. The main ideas are generally grouped into paragraphs, and examples are used to support them. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the housing example moves from a simple home to a modern two-storey house without clearly explaining the change in opinion. Some links are mechanical, and phrases such as “because of that” and “In that way” do not always make the relationship between ideas precise. The gym paragraph also shifts from exercise to meeting experts and then to changing habits. Use clearer topic sentences and make each example follow a simple cause-and-effect sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “opinions,” “lifestyle,” “perspective,” “routine” and “confidence,” and you attempt more specific terms such as “nutritionist” and “two-storey structure.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or awkward choices make parts of the message harder to understand. For example, “give and takeaway their habits” does not express the intended idea naturally, while “budgetarian house” and “gain a lot of weights” are unclear or incorrectly formed. There are also spelling errors, including “influencial,” “Futhermore” and “thingking.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, such as “change their habits,” “build an affordable home” and “gain weight or muscle.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “because,” “when” and “so that.” This gives the response some structural variety, but complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors recur in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. For example, “some of those who change their lifestyle … goes to gym” has a subject–verb agreement problem and needs an article before “gym.” The fragment “Some of them after meeting strangers” does not form a complete sentence, and “they could aim a lot of things better” has an unclear grammatical pattern. Practise building complete sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check agreement and articles during revision.

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