Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, it is common more individuals are changing their habits and opinion when they get older.In this essay, I will discuss whether I agree or disagree on this matter.
To begin with, individual who is getting older change their habits and opinion because of theeir mood swings and they choose to change. they are thinking that their habits are not fit for them anymore and they change a opinion too. for example, in my country, the philippines more people playing basketball that is a physical game and some people who is getting older they dont want to play basketball anymore due to it is high risk to them to play.
In addition, older people wants a relaxing habits. it is normal to change a habits and opinion when they get older. because of the physical and mental health older people they want a easy and relaxing habits such as, playing cards, cock figthing, and shopping in mall. they change their opinion because they cannot stick to their opinion they are thinking that they cannot do their past habits because they are old already.
To conclude, in my own opinion we should support the older people because they want to feel comfortable everytime even they have a mood we should give their needs. we can join to them and suggest a different kinds of habits that is not physically and talk to them everyday so their brain will be still active. it give a confidence to them to do what habits they want to do.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You give a clear general view that older people often change their habits and opinions, and the examples about stopping basketball and choosing more relaxing activities are relevant. The response also offers a personal recommendation in the conclusion. However, the position is not stated firmly: the introduction says you will discuss whether you agree or disagree, but does not say which, and the conclusion shifts to supporting older people rather than directly confirming your view. Some reasoning is under-developed, particularly the claim that mood swings cause changes and the link between physical or mental health and changing opinions. State your agreement clearly and explain how each example supports it.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Phrases such as “To begin with,” “In addition,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from mood swings to personal choice and then to basketball without fully connecting these points. The second paragraph repeats that older people change habits and opinions, rather than developing a distinct reason. Some references, such as “they” and “it,” are not always clear, and sentence boundaries are often missing. Organise each body paragraph around one reason, then use a clear explanation and example to develop it.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate basic ideas, including “mood swings,” “physical and mental health,” “risk,” and “comfortable.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “habits and opinion,” “relaxing habits,” and “different kinds of habits.” Some word choices make the meaning less natural, for example “a physical game” and “they want a easy and relaxing habits.” Spelling errors such as “cock figthing” also affect accuracy. Aim to use more precise expressions for changes in lifestyle and preferences, and check spelling and common word combinations. This would make your ideas easier to follow and more appropriate for an essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including explanations with “because” and examples introduced by “for example.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles, plurals and punctuation. Examples include “individual who is getting older change,” “older people wants,” and “a easy and relaxing habits.” Several sentences run together or begin with a lowercase letter, as in “they are thinking…” and “because of the physical and mental health…,” which makes the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check agreement, articles and sentence boundaries when proofreading.
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