Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It would be right to say a large numbers of people change their nature, ideas and routine day by day. As people grow older, they become more mature and try to be realistic. gradually they stop doing their favorite activities, such as reading and gardening. there are both positive and nagetive perspective about this eassy.
On the one hand, Teenagers have a lot of plans regarding their future, they have numerous dreams and ideas about life. but when they grow older, all of these teeangers become more mature just because of their responsibilities and also harsh reality of the world.However, in our contemporary society there are significent number of individuals who has hobbies and they take out some time in the busy routine and do their favorite activities. Moreover, these type of activities provide relaxtion to them. a large number of people in our society completely agree with it.
On the other hand, when a same age group of people towards the age of thirteen's, they pretend like a mature and realistics person. a particular issues is that today's world problem such as when they was teeanger they want to do everything in their life but nowadays we all suffer in the basice problems.Therefore they want to change their perspective about the world, A wide range of factors are involved in it first they don't have time to spend with their friend and families also, main key factors is that people wants to make more money that is the main reasons to change their opinions. it is consideration to a nagetive consequences.
For instance, if people change their ideas and habit with the grow older it would be often beneficial but not everytime. getting older is moslty related to create weakness in their body, in my opinion is don't stop good habits such as walking also using brain all time for giving suggestion to younger once,
In conclusion, it has both views, when person in his younge age, he would like to make their life strong for the reason when he get old then he's won't be worried.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing why people change habits and opinions as they age. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay. While you mention that changes are sometimes beneficial and sometimes negative, the development of these ideas is often superficial. For example, the paragraph regarding teenagers is somewhat confusing and does not clearly link to the core argument about changing opinions. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly supports your overall stance, and provide more specific, well-developed examples rather than general statements about 'the world' or 'basic problems'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by unclear transitions and confusing sentence structures. While you use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition 'However, in our contemporary society' which does not logically follow the previous point. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence builds logically upon the last will significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'nagetive', 'eassy', 'significent', and 'relaxtion', which distract the reader. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'create weakness in their body' instead of 'experience physical decline'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common words and phrases, and pay closer attention to spelling and word choice. Practicing synonyms for common words like 'change', 'people', and 'important' will help you express your ideas with more precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that often impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'individuals who has hobbies'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'when they was teeanger'), and misuse of articles and punctuation. Sentence structures are often simple or run-on, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'a particular issues is that today's world problem such as when they was teeanger they want to do everything' is grammatically incoherent. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent tense usage is essential for improvement.
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