Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The time for people is never remain same and it shows different phases through out the time. The change in routines and thoughts with the growing age has become very ubiquotous. The essay can be considered as agree for the statement.

First of all, their fitness level be taken as one of the reason for this change. At young age, people like to do adventurous activities, such as rock climbing, advanced bike riding, cycling, etc. They have such level of energy to fulfill these sports. While, at old age these would be find as overwhelming. As their body is no more capable of doing anything like that. The body becomes more soft and weak. Therefore, their taste of sports also changed. For example, A boy has bought bullet in his young age. It is heavy vehicle and easy to manage by a person with good muscles and strength, whereas old age man would like to have simple bike which is not that heavy.

Moving further, some of the habits are also get changed with the age. Like folks becomes more religious, spiritual. They like to do yoga, exercise instead of preferring gym. As their body cannot lift heavy weights anymore. More interestingly, their music taste also changed. At young age, they like high volume bass, Dj, pop music while later on they prefer to listen slow, smoothing songs. At old age, they like reading newspaper. At higher age, people like to be more quiet and prefer peaceful, calm environment.

In the conclusion, it can be clearly seen that with the growing age lifestyle also changed. Although, only few people are able to maintain same habits and thoughts, otherwise with the age their taste of living life also gets changed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed the prompt by agreeing with the statement and providing reasons related to physical changes and evolving interests. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the example of the 'bullet' bike is a bit specific and could have been better integrated into a broader argument about changing physical capabilities. While your position is clear, the essay would benefit from more sophisticated analysis of why opinions change, rather than just listing changes in habits. The conclusion is brief and repeats the points made in the body paragraphs rather than synthesizing them into a final thought.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Moving further', and 'In the conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions are awkward, such as 'The essay can be considered as agree for the statement'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal structure of the paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly rather than relying on simple lists.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'ubiquitous', 'adventurous', and 'spiritual'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'The time for people is never remain same' and 'The body becomes more soft'. Some spelling errors, such as 'ubiquotous', also occur. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used with greater precision to convey your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('some of the habits are also get changed'), incorrect verb tenses ('these would be find as'), and awkward phrasing ('at higher age'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent verb forms before attempting more complex structures.

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