Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

It is very common for people to change both their habits and their opinions as they get older.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Learning is a part of life and life is change at any moment of age and time .so attitude and thought process is also be a different at certain life span . i strongly accord with this notion . In the looming paragraphs i will discuss this points .

To commence with, one of the most paramount reason behind changing their habit and thinking is life style . when they are at school , college or any leaning institute their perspectives and hobbies are distinct and mostly common like (playing videos games ,Soccer ,cycling ). but as get older , completing their studies they deal with real world by joining internship and getting job . that time they meet with variety of ethnicity individuals they communicate with them about their job tasks and duties their likes and dislikes . consequently they adapt new things from others . for instance , a new learner got his job just after completion of studies that change their life totally such as follow the dress code and be tidy and be professional while communicating , be respectful , punctuality to do job well understand their responsibilities . meeting with different people , listen and observe them that makes a impact on their attitudes and thinking process .

Moreover , the another worth noticing point is maturity and practical life experiences . in the learning phase or teen age they are not mature enough to get real life experiences , when they deal with real world like join gym, voluntary work society , they get together with different age group masses such as older , mature , middle age . that time they will learn their experiences of life , this will not only improve their corporal and cerebral growth but also cognitive skills , for example , some people tell their life changing decisions , books that they learn while achieving their set of goals , money management , in gym they meet with trainers when they see their fitness they follow their footprints to achieve fitness and work on their personality development that leads to their changing their sedentary life style. They will focus on protein , calories carbs and so forth things that totally change their mind set and habits .

All in all , i believe that opinions evocations are changed at any phase of life weather person belong to a older or younger age that is totally mind and will power game those who control it they achieve what ever they want in their life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have clearly stated your position and addressed the prompt by discussing why habits and opinions change over time. You provided relevant examples, such as the transition from student life to professional employment and the influence of social environments like gyms. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat hindered by language errors, and some points, such as the mention of 'cognitive skills' and 'cerebral growth,' are a bit vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting examples are more tightly linked to the main argument and avoid over-generalising about how all people change.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To commence with,' 'Moreover,' and 'All in all,' to signal the structure. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. Additionally, there are issues with sentence-level cohesion, such as the run-on sentences in the second paragraph and the awkward phrasing in the introduction. Improving the flow between sentences would help the essay read more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'paramount,' 'ethnicity,' 'professional,' and 'sedentary.' However, there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'learning institute' instead of 'educational institution,' 'corporal growth' (which usually refers to physical size rather than health), and 'opinions evocations.' Some phrasing is also repetitive or imprecise. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, the errors occasionally draw attention and limit the precision of your expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but your writing is marred by frequent grammatical errors. These include issues with subject-verb agreement ('attitude and thought process is also be a different'), missing articles, incorrect punctuation (e.g., spaces before commas), and awkward sentence fragments. For instance, 'when they are at school , college or any leaning institute their perspectives and hobbies are distinct' lacks proper punctuation and flow. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents a higher score.

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